A Twist in My Story - Comments

Wow. When I thought things were finally going start working again with Kevin and Danielle they get even worse! Kevin and Danielle can't slowly start to give up. NOOOO!!!!!! Although, Kevin crying was cute!

I really liked this chapter. Now, I'm kind of liking Carter a lot. He seems really nice and sweet and adorable. Nick is seriously getting so evil. Poor Olivia!

Loved it :)
I'm kind of hoping that Serena will give Nick a kick in the face because he's being stupid.

Loved, loved, loved the update! :) Aw... geeze, poor Olivia in this chapter. I was feeling so bad for her. Hm... I'm beginning to not like Serena. I would fully not like her but she does have the oppurtunity to change, so... it's kind of if-y right now. But really, I thought she was seeing Olivia's interest in Nick, and would lay off of him, but... she's acting like she's interested in him, right in front of Olivia. :( Hm... and as for the rumors, I don't think Olivia should exactly go along with them... but you never know, they could turn out to be true. :/ Aw, and then Nick blowing her off... that boy is so clueless, he didn't even realize he was hurting her feelings! :(
But nice with adding the new character, I like him already, because he's being sweet to Olivia. :) Aw, and he called her beautiful! :) I like how he was being nice of her and talking to him... she should give him a chance since Nick clearly right now is interested in Serena. So Olivia should have a little something with Carter. Only question about him is... who does he look like? I had a little bit of trouble trying to picture him. And he's not on the character page, so... yeah. Sorry, everything else is great with the other characters. But I'm sure you'll put up a picture of him on the character page soon enough. I pictured Shane West when I was reading about him for some reason... I don't know why. lol. But that's who I pictured; you may have someone else in mind.
And... hm... I believe... that's it. Overall, great update!!!! I loved it all the way through; your writing has a definite flow to it. :) Can't wait for the next chapter, Kevin's update! :D

Okay! I LOVED this chapter!! :D I love Olivia's character and Carter is too sweet. But he came out of no where ...sorta, aha. (; I love this story and I can't wait to see what Natalie has in stores for it :D
Please update soon!! I LOVED the update!!

Loved the update! :) I just love how you go into detail with Joe's chapters, like about where he goes and everything. For instance, in this chapter, you described how they went to William Shakespeare's old house, like how it was known and what it looked like and everything. So it kind of feels like I'm getting a history lesson taught to me as well as I'm reading this. That's a good thing, don't worry, because it's keeping it interesting. And speaking of interesting... I'm still curious about what's going on with Luciana. Like what's up with her mood swings or what not. And the way she kept looking around... it's like she's expecting someone is coming after her or looking for her. Oh my gosh... I wonder if someone is...? If so, I'm thinking it's someone from her family. But like the girl said above me, I must know her story too! Gah, lol, you have to tell us her background and what's up with her! :P I did like in the chapter how she was kinda-sorta getting close with Joe, like she used his sweatshirt as a pillow... and loved his smell XD.... which may not seem like a big deal, but I thought it was cute. lol. :D
Anyways, overall, AMAZING update! :) Thanks again for the shout-out in the author's note. :) Um... I'm probably forgetting to mention something but as of right now I forget, so... great update! :) And can't wait for the next chapter! :D

Ugh, Luciana and her mood swings. Seriously, I thought I was a bad PMSer. Jeez la weez. I can't keep up with her. I must know her story. Now please. =]. Poor Joe, that must not be fun to deal with. Although seeing Shakespeare's house would be soo awesome! =].

I really want to know Luciana's story... please update soon! :)

Okay, I loved ths chapter!! :) I think my favorite story is Joe, then Nick, last but not least Kevin. Maybe it's because love Joe much more than Nick and Kevin ;) I wonder what's gonna happen with Nick's story next. I love Olivia's character so I can't wait to see what's gonna happen next!! :D It was a really good update girls :) Keep up the good work.

P.S. Told you I would comment Natalie :) <3

Sorry this is so late, but great update! Kevin is seriously so helpless, haha. He cannot do anything for himself, this shall certainly be a learning experience. Danielle, gosh I hope she comes home soon. They need to be happy!

Aww poor Kevin :( Maybe he should grow up and learn to take care of himself and the things around him (like Riley) before Danielle goes back to him because right now he's being a little bratty...
Can't wait for Joe's update :D

Loved the update! Aw, feeling a little bad for Kevin, but not really. I mean, what he did to Danielle wasn't too nice, so he kind of deserves what's coming to him. Especially when he doesn't even know the true reasoning why Danielle left. :/ Aw, Riley! lol. I loved how you put her in the chapter! She's such a cute dog; I love how Kevin and Danielle have her in real life. lol. :) And that laundry mishap Kevin made was one of the reasons I'm starting to feel bad for him... since he can't figure things out. But otherwise, I'm still team Danielle in this.
Hm... his boss does seem nice, but then again, he is the dude that's giving him all of the work, so... he may not be so helpful. But putting him in the chapter and explaining his background with his wife may help Kevin realize that there are little fights and spats in a relationship... that not every marriage is perfect. Maybe it's showing him that he should try to apologize to Danielle. :)
Aw, I love Danielle and Dina's sister time. It's always nice to have a little sibling bonding. :) I'm glad that Dina was able to cheer her up some; Danielle needs to stop being sad. Poor girl. :( Hm... and maybe she will start talking to Kevin again soon... or maybe her talking with Denise will get Denise to talk to Kevin... I don't know. But can't wait to see what you have next in store with Kevin's story. :)
Overall, amazing update! You did a great job! :) Can't wait to see what you have in store for the next chapter, which will go back to Joe. :) Can't wait for more! :D

i'm tired and sick at the mo so i won't say that much but i will say that i loved it and i hope that nick stops being so douchey to olivia

uh why serena im not to fond of her. i want nick and olivia to get together so bad that chapter made my cry cause he totally forgot about her and ignored her. please get them together fast! write more soon thanks!<3nat

Loved the update! Hm... typical for Nick staying up late at the beginning, playing video games with fellow college dudes. Tsk tsk. lol. Hm... not sure how I feel about Serena right now. She's... hm... so-so. But I love how she's portrayed by Cassadee Pope, cause that girl is awesome! lol. Hm... but I'm so-so with her because well, she considered Olivia before she accepted to eat lunch with Nick, but... then afterwards, she still agreed to. I have a feeling that she was looking at Olivia that way because she realized how Olivia was feeling, and knew that she liked Nick or something. That's my guess, lol. Hm... aw, but I agree with the girl above me, Nick was mean! How could he blow off Olivia like that so easliy, even after they made the plans and stuff. Poor girl, I felt bad for her the time she was in the chapter, when she had to go through that and had to watch Nick watch Serena. :(
Overall, amazing update, though. Loved it all the way through! :) Hm... so you're switching it up to Sundays now? Or every other, at least. I can deal. :) Can't wait for more though! Next one's Kevin, yay! Can't wait for it! :D

Wow, Nick is a meany. Poor Olivia! And Serena, she seems nice. But I mean, Nick and Olivia are already meant to be. So, I can't like her. And also, why did she keep staring at Olivia?

Loved the update! Haha, I thought it was funny at the beginning when Joe got lost. :P And then I loved how they went to all of those tourist locations. I'm assuming you did your research, or one of you have been to London. Sorry if you already told me you did go there, but I can't remember. I actually knew of the one location; The Globe Theater, but that's mainly because I had to research about it this past year, lol. But I thought it was neat how that was one of the locations. :) Hm... and I wonder what's up with Luciana? Like with her acting a little paranoid and strange when certain things are mentioned.... it makes me wonder what her life has been like. I'm sure you'll reveal that though soon enough. :) Aw, and yay, lol. So she's going to join him now for the countryside as well; can't wait to see where that goes with their relationship. Hm, even though Joe agreed not to, I bet he will fall in love with her, and maybe Luciana will join him for even more of the adventure besides just the countryside. :) But that's just a guess. :P Oh, and I agree with the girl above me ^ about the ending, it does sort of remind me of that movie as well. :) Overall, amazing update! Can't wait for the next chapter! I understand if it'll take you a little longer to post; school is... school. lol.
Oh, and thanks again for another shout-out. I'm probably going to thank you everytime you give me one, lol. So thanks! :D

Wow, that was one heck of a mood swing. I wonder what that's all about. And the part about Peter Pan was beautiful :). I loved that! And haha, the ending reminded me of A Walk to Remember!

Hey I was in the author's note! I don't think I've ever been mentioned in an author's note before :) I feel special.
Tbh, Joe's story isn't exactly my favourite, at the moment it feels a little slow but I'm sure it will pick up in no time :)
Can't wait for the next update!

Aw, I loved this chapter. The last flashback was the most adorable thing ever. Seriously though, how can someone be THAT bad of a cook?! Hahahahaha. Gosh, Kevin just needs to realize what he's doing and get Dani back!