Empty Fishbowl. - Comments

Well done. Congrates you almost made brust into tears. It's fucking brill but depressing like a motha-fucker. I've read some really sad Ryden's but this one it was said but It's one of those said ones where you want to go into the story and surffcate him with a big hug and never let go until he feels better and they get back together.

I take back whatever I have said about your other stories. This one is my favorite.

Ha, don't mind me. Just reading all of your Ryden drabbles, and one-shots. You really are a talented writer, with original ideas and ways of describing things perfectly. This was great, I loved how when I read it, I felt like he was actually talking to me, I was taken aback a little at how much emotion seemed to be directed towards me, but in a good way. I actually cried a little, too. I can't hate you. Because I miss you too fucking much. And I would take all the lies and all the cheating and all the dead goldfish in the world if it meant I could still have you. That's what did it, I loved that part.

This is amazing. Your write your stories so well!
I love how you go back to the goldfish several times and use it as a symbol. I think that's what makes this story flow really smoothly. I love how you go into the past and pull it into the present and into the future.
Good job!
It's been a long time since I read your work and I need to catch up!
I love your writing. Tell me when you get your first book published! ;) I will be the first to buy it!

AHH! BAD COMPUTER!!!
I wrote you this epic comment and my computer decided to spaz when I tried to submit it, so I'll give this another go...
I too laughed at the dead goldfish. Oh so cynical, that's me :P
I really liked how it was a sorrowful story, yet there was this tiny little sprinkling of humor, like the coffee and the fish. That balance is often really hard to find, but you've got it down ;D
The thing I liked most though was the emotion. It was realistic. I might not get the pairing, but I understand every bit of emotion. It's so real and just...THERE. I love it :D
The only thing was this phrase: going to pull my down by the hair <-- I think you ment me instead of my, but I could be wrong...>>
I really need to read more on here XD I think I'm going to stalk more of your stuff when I get home.
~Icamane

This almost made me cry, but I loved it. The bit about the goldfish was very sort of bittersweet. It made me laugh, and then, it didn't at all. (If that makes sense.) Beautifully written as I have come to expect from you. Kudos. :)

Well, this was certainly worth the wait! I've been creeping on you and checking for any updates twice a day...AND HERE WE ARE!

This was beautiful. I really like how you added the small details, like the goldfish and the milk, to emphasize the greater point and draw attention to the reality [I don't think that's the right word] of their relationship. OH! I loved the part kissing, "You're never going to pull my down by the hair so hard it hurts and kiss me so hard that I forget how much it hurt. I got great imagery from that part and it was really...truthful. And there is so much more that I loved but my hands are freezing and I can't type, so I'll tell you telepathically *mind waves*

Then the ending is just perfect - the way you tie it back to the beginning what with the goldfish and all. Fantastic.

I think I've told you this a bajillion times now [and I think I've told you that I've told you] that you are such an incredible writer and you make me want to dance on my roof in the rain wearing a yellow dress. I hate dresses, and I look awful in yellow.

Wonderfulwonderfulwonderful, as always <3

This is the second thing on Mibba that's ever made me cry. There were so many parts that made me laugh, like the goldfish (which made me feel kind of bad for laughing at a dead goldfish) and the Starburst throwing, but in the end when I was done reading I was seriously shocked to find that I was crying.

The story itself wasn't the most saddening thing in the world; break ups happen all the time. But your writing is so amazing and it conveys so much feeling. It honestly reminded me of the worst feelings of loss that I've ever known.

I felt pity for the narrator (I'm pretty sure it's Ryan because it just seemed like Ryan, but it could've been Brendon since it wasn't specified—which is another thing that I really loved about the story) and I felt his anger and the sense of loss that he was feeling and I actually missed someone. I'm not even sure who I was missing, but I missed someone.

I loved the layout, I love your writing, I loved the title, I really loved the last sentence—it was especially perfect. It was the perfect end for it. And it said so much.

I feel like this sounds insincere because I said that I loved a lot of the aspects of it, but it's not at all. I think this is probably one of the most sincere story comment I've ever given anyone. This was amazing. Thank you.

New story.
Drabble.
~400 words.
Ryden.
Break-up.

Happy [?] reading!

xoxox
-Dru

P.S. Thank you in advance for every review/comment.