mmmmph too short. No I'm kidding, it was good. Haha ;) Firstly, thanks for entering and putting this in my contest. And I hate to be a bother, but would you mind putting all the little details and everything in the summary? It's really hard, going back and forth and checking and all that. Moving on to the great stuff. :) That was super cute! It was well-written and you didn't dawdle in little details or too much explanations. You kept this story short and sweet- in an unbelievable way. I saw your talent immediately and right away, I was in love with the story before it even ended. And I didn't even worry about it being cliche, cause it was adorable! I'm gushing. Haha... But really, you kept it pretty smooth. I think there was a funny phrase, but I can't really tell now. And sure, its a little strange, sneaking into an abandoned house and going to the attic, but I love how you brought that in [I could tell that was your 'where' at least :) ] And it was cute how he cared for her so much. The quirky comments was funny and both of the characters were well rounded and sweet. "Your parents aren't the only example of love in the entire world. Not all love falls apart as badly as theirs did, Hal." That, and the ending about the exception, totally caught me. Great job :D
No I'm kidding, it was good. Haha ;)
Firstly, thanks for entering and putting this in my contest. And I hate to be a bother, but would you mind putting all the little details and everything in the summary? It's really hard, going back and forth and checking and all that.
Moving on to the great stuff. :) That was super cute! It was well-written and you didn't dawdle in little details or too much explanations. You kept this story short and sweet- in an unbelievable way. I saw your talent immediately and right away, I was in love with the story before it even ended. And I didn't even worry about it being cliche, cause it was adorable!
I'm gushing. Haha...
But really, you kept it pretty smooth. I think there was a funny phrase, but I can't really tell now. And sure, its a little strange, sneaking into an abandoned house and going to the attic, but I love how you brought that in [I could tell that was your 'where' at least :) ] And it was cute how he cared for her so much. The quirky comments was funny and both of the characters were well rounded and sweet.
"Your parents aren't the only example of love in the entire world. Not all love falls apart as badly as theirs did, Hal."
That, and the ending about the exception, totally caught me. Great job :D