Human Indulgence - Comments

I'm stunned. This was like reading the very best of pose poetry. I read it aloud to get an even better feel for it and it tripped off the tongue so effortlessly. It takes a real talent to create something this magnificent. I'm so glad I stumbled across your comment swap journal for this or else I never would have seen it. Though, next to this, my writing is mere wood. Subscribing immediately!

Wow, there's so much vivid imagery in this story, I love it. The description is mind-blowing, and you keep it all relevant too which is great. I would point out which parts I like best but I couldn't possibly choose! It's all so poetic and makes such an interesting read. The dailogue's wirtten out well too, and think you've got a great balance between what you convey in speech and action. Your writing style is very unique and also quite inspiring . . . can't wait to read more ^_^

Your writing is simply beautiful. I literally feel like I'm standing right there. You've truly mastered the whole 'show, not tell' concept. And the plot is magnificent; there are...so many things it could be, at this point....I didn't think of the demon thing till I read Dusk-Til-Dawn's comment, but now that I think about it....
Aha, well, amazing job :)

Holy fudgenuts that blew me away. x] I was so not expecting that sort of writing or the story, at all! Your detail is amazing, honestly. I also love the layout & the banner. :) From the layout, summary and what I've read so far I can see this has really started of well and will be an amazing story. Amazing job, well done! <3 Also, The eyes of the fiery beauty had transformed into a murk of blazing reflections. - that line was just.. wow! Awesome job. :)

Why does this still not have a million comments? People need a brain scan ASAP. I'd be happy to administer one xD
Anyways, I'm super glad that you updated this. I was wondering when you were going to. It's still so beautiful! It gives off a macabre feel to me - and that's probably the very wrong word to describe this as, but my mind is blank, haha! This is my absolutely favorite sentence out of this: It was unsure to his mind how such an angelic harlot tainted his bedclothes with colourful screams of such a handsome throat.
Prostitution isn't cool, girls! x]
Lovely job, once again! (: <3

Fuck. This is like a poem, modified and enhanced to suit a story. It was brilliant. I absolutely LOVE your descriptions. The way you painted your characters, their lives and the way they looked? Just...gah!

I'm sorry that I can't give you a deeper comment but I'm still recovering from the awesomeness that is this story.

o.O

Well I'm glad you took a break!
This is so darn fantastic, it's definitely one of the best pieces you've written.
I've found that in some of your stories, although beautifully told, you have a knack of over describing.
This chapter was perfect in every sense of the word.
The characters and how they felt, their reactions to the world around them and their habits made then so real.
Beautiful. Just, wow. So very beautiful.

Hehe every time I read this story I think of Dorian Gray. :D

This isn't new, but, your descriptions are so amazing.
You know that?
You know what else I like? The way the characters speak.
Yes, the dialogue is well done too.
“And why ever not?” Ripples the waves of his speech, with an intense laughter.

“because it is to resign from resistance. To give into temptation is to give into all temptation”
I just feel so smart reading this because you use such good word choice. (Yes I notice stuff like that, as I say to everyone.)

Wow, the detail in this is amazing.
The way you write, is so lovely<3
This is freaking great and I'm subscribing:D

*I will read the other two chapters XD

I have to say, this chapter turned out wonderfully. I read the other two chapters too but the third one was really good considering you tried writing it three times. Well done on that. <3
You had a great deal of detail and I like that. This has an interesting plot and I can't wait to read more. Seriously, this was lovely. <3

Goodness m'dear, your descriptions are amazing. You have so much talent it's crazy.
I love how I can almost see everything happening.
I love it all. Beautiful <3

Oooh, I think I read the first chapter of this once, but I didn't know you continued it. :D
Your writing paints a vivid picture in my mind's eye- I love, love, love it. It flows so well and your descriptions are just beautiful.

I adore you descriptive writing. Honestly, you're so talented it's uncanny. I wish I was so talented when I was your age.
I love how it feels so vivid, I can picture myself in the scene, watching as the story unravels.
True beauty in this story, I assure you. :)

This story is so awesome! :)
I like it a lot! :)
The layout is simple but cool.
I love your writing style. It really flows.

Awesome job! :)

This story draws the reader in with its poetic description.
You make this story flow so well, it is amazing!

This is really cool! I've never seen anything like it on Mibba before!

Your description, by far, is the best I've ever seen here.

As I was reading, I was reminded how the diction was so similar to authors a few centuries ago, and because of that I give props to you.

I love it so far, and I can't wait for the upcoming updates.

I read only the first chapter, because I need to get my ass in front of a movie at this point in time.

First of all, I don't like that there's no summary. I don't read stories with no summary, end of. That's what pulls me in basically, and makes me think "hmmm I want to read this." I won't read books without reading the text on the back, so I don't read stories without summaries.

You forget the commas, periods, exclamation marks, etc, after someone has spoken, and it gets a bit distracting.

Like;
"I hate you," she said calmly.

"That's fine." Her voice was calm as she turned around.

(Examples pulled out of thin air)

Now, it might sound as if I hate this, but I really don't, trust me. It was very gripping, and it seems interesting enough. When I have more time I'll revisit and read the rest. And also, your writing is a lot better than mine was back when I was your age.

This was beautifully written, and the desription was to die for!

Beautiful, amazing, wonderful.

Just the flow of words, linked all together, weaving a tale of wonderment.

Dude.

You're amazing.

I will definitely subscribe.