I really enjoyed reading this. The idea is something that's always interested me and you've written it really well.
Although, I will admit (don't hate me for this!) that it would have been easier to read if you'd set it out as paragraphs like it's suggested in the Mibba Rules:
“Mum, I found a dead body today.”
“Really? That’s nice dear…”
“I was just down the police station.”
(I do mean for the large paragraphs mainly but, I didn't want to quote so much). It doesn’t really matter but, it would be easier to read this way. You could show time differences by double or even triple hitting enter if you do set it out this way.
Other than that, this was a brilliant read. You should be really proud of this.
The idea is something that's always interested me and you've written it really well.
Although, I will admit (don't hate me for this!) that it would have been easier to read if you'd set it out as paragraphs like it's suggested in the Mibba Rules:
“Mum, I found a dead body today.”
“Really? That’s nice dear…”
“I was just down the police station.”
(I do mean for the large paragraphs mainly but, I didn't want to quote so much).
It doesn’t really matter but, it would be easier to read this way.
You could show time differences by double or even triple hitting enter if you do set it out this way.
Other than that, this was a brilliant read.
You should be really proud of this.