I loved the concept of this story. Taking the red brick road...brilliant :) You executed the story amazingly (which is apparently a real word. Go figure) and I loved your descriptions. Easy to follow and yet very thoughtful and meaningful too.
I'm so glad I'm not the only one who thought of this. I actually rewrote The Wizard of Oz in like sixth grade, with Dorothy taking the red brick road...of course, mine ended differently than this. But...ya know.At least I'm not the only one that thinks this way.
That was amazing. I was shocked to see many updates in one day, or so. But I was happy and sad. I loved the ending. Very Alice. Geeze, you and I should right a story together. The only thing is I saw Birdo coming.
really really like this. Most of mibba posts are terrible. the way you worded the way the man reacted to tobo's first bite though in the first chapter could have been worded better, just pointing it out. The 'very male yell' could possibly been 'a yelp rang out from the man's strangely voice rang out as he tried to free himself of the dog's grip' or something like that?
Great job!