I Gave Up - Comments

@ Kurtni
xD no from the blog. It's a free comment don't worry dear.

@ Neche Narcissist
Thanks!

Did you get this story through comment swap? That would be the weirdest coincidence after I commented on your addict story blog xD

Holy shit.

Wow sorry for cussing but that's the only way I could think of describing my first thoughts on this.

This was utterly amazing. There is so much emotion in such a short piece.

The description is different than anything I have ever read and the moment of panic was exactly what I personally would expect from an accident like this.

Dear author, this may have been short but it drenched in emotion. I have to congratulate you for this, it's a great short piece of literature. ~Marian.

Dear author, this may have been short but it drenched in emotion. I have to congratulate you for this, it's a great short piece of literature. ~Marian.

I liked it, because it did feel rather real. Especially with the panicked "uh oh" moment. As someone who has... been in that situation, I can say that that's pretty much what it feels like. Anywho, I got a bit thrown off by the tense, starting at " Will she grieve for me?", because going witht he rest being in past tense ("I could feel", "when I shut my") I thought it would be "Would she grieve for me", but that's probably just me.

The background sort of blinded me for a bit. x]

But yah, it was well written, I liked your wording, because though it was descriptive it was also very blunt, in places, and direct.

Worst. Comment. Ever. x]

Kurtni, you are such a great writer. Wow, this is probably the best description I’ve read on here in a while. I love the layout too, the colors and the polka dots...it’s funny because in the layout the colors are so bright, red and warm looking and the content of the story seems really cold to me. I dunno if you’ve gone through something similar (well, obviously since you’re still here it couldn’t have been too similar) but either way, you captured it perfectly – and that’s what really impresses me about your work, you can write these scenarios that you haven’t gone through absolutely perfectly. You are incredibly, incredibly talented.

The descriptions you used here were just incredible. Despite the short length of the story, the character's last moments feel drawn-out, while the state of panic she (I imagine the character to be a she, at least) is slipping into also seems to be slowed down, frozen, by the pills. I love how the words read just like thoughts, and the small but thought-provoking look we were given into her the narrator's life. That's probably one of my favorite things about this, actually, it doesn't just focus on the character's death, as so many stories like this do, but the life that they had before.
The last three lines were tragic and poetic, and I must say that you really got me to feel for this character in such a small amount of words. I barely know her (or him?), but I feel like I'm reading the death scene of a character that I've read hundreds of pages about.

I'm kind of sad that the person gave up, even though they couldn't stop it. And when they were talking about their mom, wondering might go through her head. I'd certainly want to know what my mom was thinking, only because I'm a momma's girl.

The first line drew me in so much.
The words you used to describe the feelings were so perfect.
The regret the person felt about taking the drugs and talking about their mom was a beautiful touch.
The last line was perfect.
Your layout was great, the story was fantastic for being so short.
Wonderful.

I like you descriptive style of writing. I had never heard of the drug before, so the author's note was definitely nice. But I think you perfectly described the effects and her/his feelings. Great job!

That was really good! You're such a good writer. This story was short, but so powerful. So very powerful. Great job!

This was amazing.
Your banner was gorgeous btw, but your words were absolutely beautiful.
Like the user above me said, it's short but I think if this were any longer, it would ruin the effect.
You did a wonderful job with it.

Even though it's a short oneshot, it packs a pretty powerful punch. Your writing style made me feel like I almost could go into the character's mindframe- I'd definitely be thinking about my mom in that sort of a situation. I love how the very last bit of the first paragraph is like a muted panic- she knows what's happening, but she also knows she can't stop it.

The last sentence is absolutely perfect. Absolutely wonderful work :3