October 26th, 2009 at 08:20pm
i miss this.
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terribly.
Hooray for long comments!
- budgie:
- A lanky boy of about ten scanned the lunchroom for an appropriate table to sit, looking just as out of place as he felt. His blue eyes darting from table to table, group to group.
Young!Mike is so adorable. :arms:
“I…I think I need you to stay. So I can tell him.”
-can't help but giggle-
This part is really tense (apart from my giggle fit.) It's really well done. I can really feel Mike's nervousness. And you dragged it on, which just made me feel even more nervous. :XD
Billie nodded weakly and moved forward, hugging Mike softly.
:cheese: I love how they're not all "LET'S MAKE OUT AND HAVE SEX NOWWW" straight away, how they actually talk and hug and whatnot before attacking each other's faces. :tehe:
Mike’s eyes widened. “Y-You told Adrienne?”
Oh my goodness, I gasped out loud.
I love this story! :arms: Poor Billie.
The MySpaces are pretty cool too. :file: Mike's is private? How rude of him. :tehe:
Also, where did you get the title from? Because I've seen Mike wearing a shirt with that on it. :think:
Yeah, Temptation is pretty hard for me to work on but you never know...I might MIGHT try and finish it. lol.
- Slap Happy Bullet:
- i always feel terrible when a perfectly wonderful relationship turns bad in the fiction world. i have an overactive imagination, so the images connected to what i read can come off quite strong. i just feel terrible.
bbbuuuuttt
i like that you mention it's an end, that there is some sort of closure to the relationship and that part of his life.
i can't wait for updates.
i would really really really really really really really love it if you finished is it temptation or is it love. i know it's not quite your thing anymore, but you have no idea how much i would appreciate it.
i LOVE this story.
Well that's no good. *runs off to try and finish writing*
- JustBeingMe:
- A new chapter, yays!! :D
I thought this story was dead...
Great, as always, and I'm going to sit here and wait until there's another chapter! (so you better hurry up, or I'll starve to death)
:P
I know. Hopefully the next chapter will be easier to write, haha. I got started on it, about halfway through and I really wanna get back to writing quicker.
- Slappy J. Minnelli:
- D: Poor Billie :[
hehe. sorry, sorry. I'm in the middle of an update for one of my new stories. It's flowing good and I don't wanna mess that up. Swear I'll try and get on this again, Kristina.
- Slap Happy Bullet:
- nudge-nudge
UPDATE!
XD I'm sorry...really truly am that I havent updated Temptation in...MONTHS.
- Slap Happy Bullet:
- ohh damn.
brittney is always a hardcore bitch and you make me hate her more and more. and when i think of her name tattooed on mike forever, i get sad.
as for your writing, amazing as usual. you didn't go over the top on how depressed the both of them should be. you wrote what was completely neccessary to get the point acrossed, and i loved it in a fucked up sort of way.
will adie and billie ever find a way to talk to each other?
i love this story and i want to see many many updates, even though it takes me forever to read them. you know i love your writing, so i really hope you keep up with this story, unlike some of your other gems. *cough*temptation*cough*
Thanks so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
- Drummergirl:
I am utterly in love with this story, I can't wait to see what's next, your a real awesome writer. So conflicting and passionate.LOVELY!
More soonish.
- cat in dryer:
- Aww poor Billie :(
But an all around great chapter, can't wait for more ^^
I need to see what the fuck the last thing I wrote was on this.
If it's done or nearly done I'll try and post it up.