The Drug Diaries - Comments

This is really good. I can't wait to read more<3

This is just amazing. I can literally feel how she feels. Definitely going to read more.

After reading X, I find that the situations are becoming more and more interesting and intriguing. I cannot wait to see what is to come.

This story is amazing. I hope you post more soon (:

this is, for a story about drugs, surprisingly amazing :)

Kay.
You know I suck at reviews.
BUT I WANT AN UPDATE NOW.
It's amazing.
Iloveyou and your writing abilities.

I'm not gonna try and sound amazingly smart at this, but your story is beyond fabulous. :] So far I can't find someone who's detail matches yours on the site, but it seems like there's tons of people who read your story that are. Hope you update soon!

I am very impressed. You manage to write a story about mushrooms in a very creative and deep way. You don't only talk about what you see, but also what you feel. Just like you said in your note, it's about what you think and feel when you're tripping. You definitely define what it is like to trip, how everything doesn't seem real and you think profound thoughts, without glorifying it.

^Thanks for the comment

And really, after you trip shrooms, you truly do recall every single detail. It's completely different than drinking. When you drink, sometimes you cannot even remember where you were, but when you're tripping, you can tell someone something crazy like how many tiles were on the floor. It's surreal.

Story review game.

Title: A title that is exactly what you get. It may not be something fancy, or have tons of deep meanings, but it is a drug diary, and it does just feel right.

Summary: The phrase I want someone years from now to find this and know what 'reckless living' truly is. kind of blew me away. At first, the summary doesn't hold anything spectacular. It's a good enough summary, but it's nothing extra. Then that line comes along and I instantly went "ooh, I get it!"

Layout: I like the colors used in the layout, as well as the "box" fading out into the background. The banner is a bit too big for my taste, but that's just me. Personally I feel it gets a bit too much with the person smoking, only because it doesn't feel like it's got the same mood as the rest of the banner. It feels a bit out of place. But overall a nice banner.

Chapter 2:
I opened my third eye to the world.
- A really good phrase to have in the beginning of the chapter. It sort of stops me in my reading, making me hold and think for a second.

Through the shadows of the fire’s flickering flames, I saw a thin boy with straw colored hair slip a ziplock bag full of white and grey chunks out of his flannel pocket.
- I like that you describe it as "gray chunks", because it helps with the image that doing shrooms is in no way "glamorous" and it doesn't look good.

I do feel the paragraph describing the preparations for her to take the shrooms a bit... too detailed? It's good, no doubt about it. But it sort of gives me the feelig that would you really describe it that detailed in an actual diary? Well, rethinking the purpose of the dary maybe she would, but I don't know...

Bitter and earthy, I assumed a pile of dirt tasted exactly the same.
- I might be completely wrong, but I think it's supposed to be a semicolon and not a comma?

Amazed, I starred at the flames, which became the most vibrant shades of red and orange.
- Do you mean "stared"?

Little over an hour passed, yet I felt as though my mind traveled somewhere far into the future, light-years away.
- Another strong sentence, which sort of throws me out of the pace of the story, but in a good way.

Why limit the exploration of the woods to a fine path? I saw it as a line to be crossed.
- This to me ties in with the whole intensity of that one line in the summary. It's blunt, in a way. Like she could be explaining anything, no matter how horrible, and then yet by adding "I saw it as a line to be crossed", she's excusing it. If you know what I mean. Like she could simply say "I got high and killed someone. I saw it as a line to be crossed." Raw, you know.

Just came across "starring" again, is that another way of sleeping it? Because I thought it was staring. Am I entirely wrong? xD

Overall this chapter was very powerful, and I mostly liked it. I still get this... feeling of, "would you really remember it that detailed if you were that high?" but maybe that's just me. I've never been high, so I can't really think back on experience. I've only ever been drunk, but I know I could never retell anything like this so very experienced. But this may just be my lack of knowledge with drugs to be honest. I like also how you explain the effects of mushrooms in the author's note, something that might be needed in case someone like me reads it who has no idea about drugs. Other than what I've seen in movies, that is.
I like your variation between longer and shorter sentences, it gives he piece a really nice flow. This may not be my type of story, but you've done an excellent work, and I just might check back and read more someday. :)

Sorry for any spelling mistakes, it's always awkward when you accidentally have them while reviewing someone's work.

This is really good.
It's like , something that is so real for me as well.
I mean I am 14 and this stuff happens all the time for me.
My friend had a bong today in first period.
Let's just say, that I felt like Christina did at the end of the chapter.

I really like how you wrote this, your descriptive ways and the diary form.
You can really pull off writing about drugs, most people on here can't.
I really like this, well done.