Before the Fall - Comments

Comment swap.

Personally--and this is nothing against you, you really write quite well. It wasn't choppy or repetitive or any of those typical problems, I'm just not a fan of arranged marriage stories. I never could get into them. I read the first eight chapters though. It isn't a bad story at all. I've just seen the general idea of arranged marriages too much to be able to have one hold my attention for long. It's really nothing against your writing skill, you write quite well.

The only thing that irritated me a bit were how underplayed Faye's emotions were. I get she wants to be a good girl, but it just felt a bit unrealistic to have her react to the news they weren't really her parents do calmly, or get along with Nace so well despite circumstances. Any person in that situation would have been so very emotionally compromised it wasn't funny. Her reaction just left more to be desired. Also she really should feel a bit more uncomfortable about sharing a bed with a total stranger. She knows nothing about him, shouldn't she be a bit more wary of him?

hmmm I juzt realized that you wrote this becuase i read it a lond time ago and its a great story
but i never looked at the auther until now...it was a really good story!?!

I loved this story! I thought it was soo cute!! :D <3

It was so original. I love how it was different than other arranged marriage stories.

i loved that story. thanks soo much for writing it! it made me cry and smile and everything in between! =]

....
Oh.
My.
God!
What an ending! I loved everysecond of this story. Every second! You did a wonderful job. I praise you on your writing, on your unique way of plotting an arranged marriage. Many these days are the standard girl gets told, girl moves in, they fall in love happily ever after. But Faye.. she is so unique. You are unique. Bravo, darling!

Please make a sequel i want to no wat happens after happily ever after

Hi I just read ur story in an hour
and I'd like to say it was the best 60 minutes of my life![=
Can you make a sequel?
I'd really like to know what would happen next[=

Is there going to be a sequel because i love this story and I really think it needs a sequel!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

OMG! I've been so far behind and she could have died and she knows he loves her and WHAT'S GONNA HAPPEN? This is driving me nuts. >.<

Love, love, love this story! =]

*dies happy*
I love you.

* characters

Great update. I like how Faye likes Nace, but is still insistent on getting out and on her own. She sounds a lot like me. The character are great, the story line is coming along nicely, and overall its a great piece of work. Keep it up, and hope to see another chapter soon.

I'm surprised to find an arranged marriage story that actually has good grammars and style.
The beginning is great. It makes me want to find out what's the deal with the baby.

Loved the updates! It was nice to see the fiesty side of Faye. Update again soon, I hope.

hey this is really good, first of all considering there are thousands of storyies like it it nice to see the main character don't ttaly hate each other. second it's really well writen compaired to other stories. you have a way with words. so keep writing :).
<3 Grapophobic/ Emily

This is good. Keep it up. I can't wait to see another chapter.