Olive and an Arrow - Comments

Thank you so much! :) that means a whole lot to both of us.
Keep reading and we aim to please you guys with chapters to come. :)

Damn, I'm glad I decided to claim this. At first, the lack of a summary kinda made me doubt. I really like stories that give you a bit of what the plot is it about, so, when I don't see a summary, I usually just click back. But I'm glad I decided to continue.

I really liked the layout, by the way. Really subtle colors and easy to the eye.

Your descriptions are so beautiful and realistic. Everything was easy to picture in my mind, from the sea, to the tide, to the moon, and even her car. You have plenty of descriptions without making the story overly saturated by them, and they flow nicely with the story line.

I noticed you missed to space out some paragraphs. You might want to change that, because it looks a bit cluttered like that. I think the first one I noticed was between the first and third paragraph, the first glimpse into the past (in italics).

I also liked how you incorporated the whole situation that she went through into the first chapter without giving too much away, hooking up the reader and making us to want to know more.

Overall, it was an amazing beginning for a story. It really pulls the reader in and your narration is gorgeous.

the lyrics are from a band called Philmont, and the song is called Letters to the Editor.
it's a christian band and song but i tweaked it a bit to make it seem like he is writing about Aria.
:) thanks for reading and keep commenting! we love it.

This is a really cute, sweet chapter :3

I like the name of it and everything, I'm curious what the song it called; I tried to google the lyrics and I didn't see anything XD

Check out one of ma stories plz wen u have time... :D

POst MOre!!!!!!!!!!!

WOW!