First off, you should just read back next time to make sure that all of your paragraphs are separated evenly, because only a few of your paragraphs are separated, while some others are stuck together. Just sayin'. (:
I don't really understand the ending - like, how does it affect the future, her life, etc. And how did it really tie in with people always staring at her, and the teasing, etc., and the fact that she lives in a trailer home? Don't get me wrong, I like the way you wrote this, but I just thought that a lot of the things didn't really tie in together.
I don't really understand the ending - like, how does it affect the future, her life, etc. And how did it really tie in with people always staring at her, and the teasing, etc., and the fact that she lives in a trailer home? Don't get me wrong, I like the way you wrote this, but I just thought that a lot of the things didn't really tie in together.