Is this a rewrite of one of your previous stories? Because I seem to remember it. And from what I remember, it was pretty good. This is so witty and original; I absolutely love your characters. I know it's the only first chapter, but you can just tell it's going to be good. Unlike so many stories I've read, they actually have unique voices. The mother is so spunky (even though she doesn't stick around long!), and she does give out some really great advice.
I adore the layout, and your writing style. It's really a pleasure to read. And I really hope you keep writing this.
I adore the layout, and your writing style. It's really a pleasure to read. And I really hope you keep writing this.