When I was a Kid - Comments

  • luna phantomhive.

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    I loved the pattern of flowers in the background of the layout. I can't say for the picture...as there was none. I think there was once, since there's like an empty square around the title. Still, it looks good even without it. c:

    I loved this story. I was a bit confused about the whole presents and kuya Mikko, but still, that only added to how touching and beautiful this short little story was. Even when I was a little kid, I didn't think those things, only about the presents. It was that which I related to most. I think it's important to be able to relate to a story, too. In my opinion, that is. This story really portrayed a wonderful message. And I liked the format of the story, too. It's my first time seeing it like that.

    I loved it! :3 I hope I get to see more of your work.

    -Luna
    May 29th, 2011 at 04:37am
  • Cascade

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    I thought this was really good; it totally reminds us all of when we were young and free. Haha. :3

    I liked the layout of this but not quite the picture. I just felt like it didn't match, but that's just me, I guess. :P I like how you used speech, and then described and explained more about it. I chose to comment on this one because once I saw the word 'kuya', I just had to choose it! I'm Filipino! xD The words in italics were also very effective, like a lot of people said.

    So, all in all, I think this was very sweet. Things like that do happen in real life, kids do do that, so I think this is also very realistic. Good job on this! :3
    November 7th, 2010 at 10:59am
  • sainted swan

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    That was so adorable. It was great; amazing.
    I agree with florence about the indenting the italics parts

    that it was okay to mix my family's leftover food and drinks into a gooey mess on my plate when we're at a restaurant;
    I liked it, mostly cause I did that a couple of times. xD

    Lovely, cute layout too, love(:
    August 21st, 2010 at 04:43pm
  • she floats

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    That was adorable. :3
    I used to do that thing with my plates all of the time. Seriously. But I'd only do it when my dad wasn't looking and then I'd try to cover it up. Hahah.

    You really captured it well. It was cute (:
    I love your writing.
    August 21st, 2010 at 08:36am
  • Teenage Dirtbag.

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    I thought this was sweet. tehe I like how you juxtaposed the past and the present, and you managed to do it without breaking the flow of the story. And the last sentence was especially powerful. I think a lot of people can relate to this, including me. It made me smile. Good job. Cute
    August 19th, 2010 at 10:20pm
  • Lizzie Borden.

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    The layout is very nice. I think it fits the story’s childish feel with the bright colors. It’s fun!

    “…that it was okay to mix my family's leftover food and drinks into a gooey mess on my plate when we're at a restaurant;”
    Oh my gosh! I totally used to do that!!

    For me, I saw this story going on in a living room sort of setting. I saw it as a family birthday scene.

    This was awesome! It really captured the ideals of being a kid.

    Amazing!
    August 15th, 2010 at 04:21pm
  • freckles.

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    I LOVE THIS. (:
    It's so cute.
    And this:
    "I'm glad to have grown up enough to know which one is really better"
    is really powerful.
    August 9th, 2010 at 06:43am
  • florence

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    I think this was cute. (:

    I like how you indented the italics parts -- it gave it an even nicer effect.
    July 29th, 2010 at 10:46pm
  • Original Copy-Cat

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    It reminds me when I was little and I would always say "Open the lights! Close the lights!" and my American friends would look at me like I'm crazy. It gives me a feeling of being in the Philippines again.

    What I do like is how the paragraphs intertwine with each other and create some dimension not a lot of stories have. How confusing and simple life was at the same time. Very well done. I was always an Ate--but i wish i had a kuya.
    July 25th, 2010 at 07:57am
  • nebulas

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    I liked the premise of the story and I related a lot to what the main character thought/did when he was a child tehe To be honest, I had to read the story two times to understand it. Not because of your wording and such, I suppose, maybe my lack of attentiveness was the problem. There was a lot of capitalization problems that I noticed, I don't know if that was done purposely or on accident but I would fix that. It left me with a lot of questions when I finished, and I admire that in a story.
    July 24th, 2010 at 01:29am