Angela! :O I LOVE this! Your writing has gotten soooo much better! I love the plot so far! It seems veryyy interesting ;) Umm... just watch out for saying the same word over and over again. Like in the paragraph you talk about her hair... you say hair like five times :P Haha, but yeahhh... this is very good so far! I demand you keep writing it! Oh! And this is Ashley by the way :D