In Her Eyes Lies Her Heart - Comments

  • celestial_royalty

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    You're very welcome. The more you write, the more I'll comment. I'm never out of ideas ;]
    March 21st, 2015 at 01:43am
  • Black_Cherry_Seas

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    @ celestial_royalty
    Thank you for your input, Love, I will proofread again, and also see if I can put a little more of the awkwardly adorable Harry flavor back into it :) I really value your opinion, let me know if anything else occurs to you!
    March 20th, 2015 at 04:12am
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    You wrote " He fell fell into bed" but that's all I kept track of. I just ignored anything else that may have gone wrong. The paragraphs aren't spaced out. This was interesting- I knew the second Merlin was mentioned that he cursed her. Poor girl, although she did sin as well. Harry sounded a little out of character (unlike his typical awkward fourteen year old self, I mean) but I stand neutral on that point. It will be interesting to see how to break the curse. I bet Dumbledore will contribute something, perhaps in his will or someplace peculiar.
    March 19th, 2015 at 07:00am
  • Bronzelove

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    Yes!! You are back!!! I'm sooo glad that you are back
    December 15th, 2014 at 07:02am
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    @ celestial_royalty
    Thanks! I fixed that right up, I must have been daydreaming when I wrote it :p. And I know its slow going, I'm picking back up, I already have half the next chapter done :) its going to get so much better! Thanks so much for your feedback. If theres anything you think might be cool, message me :)
    August 15th, 2014 at 02:08am
  • celestial_royalty

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    Legend of the Seeker? You wrote "Ron" instead of Eve in there, just once. Things are progressing reaaaaaaaaaally slowly :S
    August 14th, 2014 at 07:41am
  • forbiddensecrets

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    Yay I love it! Glad you're back!
    August 14th, 2014 at 05:28am
  • celestial_royalty

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    I basically skipped the entire second chapter of the Yule ball for the expected ending...
    May 5th, 2014 at 12:59am
  • forbiddensecrets

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    It's soo good!!! Can't wait for you to add another chapter!
    December 3rd, 2013 at 11:04pm
  • celestial_royalty

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    Hahahaha, that was great! Pretty close to the storyline- was that part with Lavender in the books? It would have been so clever of you to pair her up with Ron and start the drama a year early! The dragon was so cute <3
    December 3rd, 2013 at 09:25pm
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    @ celestial_royalty
    Yes! I am almost done with the next chapter. Its Final exams next week here, so Ive been really swamped. Thanks for your patience!
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    Cherry
    December 2nd, 2013 at 08:22pm
  • celestial_royalty

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    Are you going to update this soon?
    November 26th, 2013 at 10:53pm
  • forbiddensecrets

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    Love this! Can't wait to read more!
    November 6th, 2013 at 10:40pm
  • celestial_royalty

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    That part with Sirius is interesting. We all love that bad boy stereotype
    July 29th, 2013 at 09:46am
  • Abmora01

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    Yay you keep updating.... Oooo how did she know Sirius ..... We're they in love??? Plz I would love to keep reading
    July 27th, 2013 at 12:35pm
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    im loving it plz keep it writing
    July 26th, 2013 at 11:33am
  • Trig-ger

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    its really good
    May 20th, 2013 at 03:49am
  • celestial_royalty

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    @ Black_Cherry_Seas
    Aww. I know what you mean. Have you re-read the story to see where you'd imagine the direction the story would take? That was a horribly written sentence. I'm quite curious about Eve. I think whatever happens next should reveal more of her personality- who she is as a character rather than her surroundings (For example, the Beauxbatons carriage. It's a nice touch that adds to personalizing your story, but it doesn't really explain much about our main character's intentions. :)
    May 17th, 2013 at 07:17am
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    @ celestial_royalty
    I know :( im working on it, hit a rough spot in the plot line, but im writing, just not posting until im completely satisfied with it
    May 17th, 2013 at 06:32am
  • celestial_royalty

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    I don't see the 'storm of writing' in the status bar~
    May 16th, 2013 at 03:25am