@ celestial_royalty Thank you for your input, Love, I will proofread again, and also see if I can put a little more of the awkwardly adorable Harry flavor back into it :) I really value your opinion, let me know if anything else occurs to you!
You wrote " He fell fell into bed" but that's all I kept track of. I just ignored anything else that may have gone wrong. The paragraphs aren't spaced out. This was interesting- I knew the second Merlin was mentioned that he cursed her. Poor girl, although she did sin as well. Harry sounded a little out of character (unlike his typical awkward fourteen year old self, I mean) but I stand neutral on that point. It will be interesting to see how to break the curse. I bet Dumbledore will contribute something, perhaps in his will or someplace peculiar.
@ celestial_royalty Thanks! I fixed that right up, I must have been daydreaming when I wrote it :p. And I know its slow going, I'm picking back up, I already have half the next chapter done :) its going to get so much better! Thanks so much for your feedback. If theres anything you think might be cool, message me :)
Hahahaha, that was great! Pretty close to the storyline- was that part with Lavender in the books? It would have been so clever of you to pair her up with Ron and start the drama a year early! The dragon was so cute <3
@ celestial_royalty Yes! I am almost done with the next chapter. Its Final exams next week here, so Ive been really swamped. Thanks for your patience! <3 Cherry
@ Black_Cherry_Seas Aww. I know what you mean. Have you re-read the story to see where you'd imagine the direction the story would take? That was a horribly written sentence. I'm quite curious about Eve. I think whatever happens next should reveal more of her personality- who she is as a character rather than her surroundings (For example, the Beauxbatons carriage. It's a nice touch that adds to personalizing your story, but it doesn't really explain much about our main character's intentions. :)
@ celestial_royalty I know :( im working on it, hit a rough spot in the plot line, but im writing, just not posting until im completely satisfied with it