That was... haunting, erinbby. ._. Like, omfgwitfh.
I've already told you this, but reading it, it felt like I was there. That's how much friggin' detail you put into your stuff. :twitch: And the line of lyrics in the last part was just like, a mini sort of epilogue. Sort of. It just tied everything even tighter together. I love how you included the flashbacks to what was happening and back, because it showed that even though the guy seemed harmless at first, it escalated into something much more... dangerous than that. >_> Life lesson learned: don't trust any member of the opposite sex.
Don't say that you think this is shitty because holy shit, it's far from it. I wish I had your talent with first person, but I'm stuck with the short and fragmented sentences and the repetitive one-liners. -_-
I've already told you this, but reading it, it felt like I was there. That's how much friggin' detail you put into your stuff. :twitch: And the line of lyrics in the last part was just like, a mini sort of epilogue. Sort of. It just tied everything even tighter together. I love how you included the flashbacks to what was happening and back, because it showed that even though the guy seemed harmless at first, it escalated into something much more... dangerous than that. >_> Life lesson learned: don't trust any member of the opposite sex.
Don't say that you think this is shitty because holy shit, it's far from it. I wish I had your talent with first person, but I'm stuck with the short and fragmented sentences and the repetitive one-liners. -_-