I actually really like this story, its got a great beginning/middle and the imagery you create is really amazing. I was a bit confused at first, and in my opinion, as just as a suggestion, if you leave a space or an extra line between the paragraphs and lines it will become a lot clearer and easier to read. However this is a really intriguing well written story, you are an incredibly talented writer. update soon :)
July 25th, 2010 at 03:58pm