Delta Three Six Alpha - Comments

First off, the layout is very elegant and nicely put together. I love that it kind of has nothing to do with the story itself! Also, stop saying you can't write in every chapter description! Because you can and you shouldn't put yourself down all the time. I am normally not the type to read a story like this but it immediately attracted my attention. I am a reader and a writer who loves detail. A lot of the times I over detail everything, but with you, you give short quick sentences to the point. Usually I wouldn't like that, but in this case, and with what your story is about I think it definitely works! I love how all the characters have different names, but I would like to know more about them (I only read till chapter 2, so i will probably go read more now..). The only thing is that I got extremely confused when the P.O.V. changed. I don't exactly knew who was talking in the first chapter.. wave? and then Brush was talking in chapter 2? It got a little bit confusing, and especially because you say Brush is 16, but I haven't heard of someone graduating high school at 16. Maybe it is just where I'm from, but that is all I know. Other than those minor mistakes, I absolutely love your style of writing and I love where this plot is going!

Oh my goodness, thank you so much for reccomending this!
It's right up my street; I love it!
Subscribing :)

No. Never say that you can't write. This is proof of otherwise!

You're really talented, and I am proud to say that your writing's biggest strength is its originality and how it is never squashed with too much emotion. I dislike being smothered with drama, haha, and your writing is always such a fresh thing to read.

I actually read most of this a while ago, but I went back and read it all again, and I wasn't disappointed.
The only thing I would ask you improve on is your plot-tempo, if you have a designated plot.
So far everything's just shooting, battle, action, etc. And this isn't a bad thing! Don't get me wrong.
I just think it would be even better if you added present-related conflicts with your characters.
I see glimmers of this every now and then, but you would be amazing to strengthen their conflicts.

And... that's all. Don't be offended by my advice, and you definitely don't have to follow it.
I just like to help out sometimes, eh... and I just hope that the writer can take it.
I trust that you can. Regardless, I really love this story. Probably my favorite of yours.

I've noticed how your writing gets better and better the more recent it is.
This means you are improving your skill with every moment you write!
It's such a wonderful thing, isn't it? You have talent, and I'd wish you'd see that more clearly.
Keep writing and the whole world will bend in your hands. (Yeah, yeah, dramatic, but whatever.)

(:

Aww, don't say you can't write, because you definitely can(:

I look forward to more!

Gah, I love negaswaps.<3 I got to re-read the whole first chapter. C:

My only complaint would be to work on your spacing. It looks messy when everything else is sperate and then there's a tiny block of bulk. That's mostly just a personal peeve, aha.

“Tango whiskey delta three six alpha, this is”
NO
“Tango whiskey delta five zero.”

I'm not sure if this one sentence or not? If not, it needs to have punctuation marks of course.

Other than that, I didn't notice anything else. C:
I really do like this story.

I really like this. I'm not sure about the writing - it seems like you can improve itbut I'm nott sure how... It just doesn't seem to flow right if that makes any sense. I love the idea though. It's really interesting and even as someone who doesn't like military centered stories, I really enjoy it.

This was so amazing I just read three chapters straight. (:
Nough Said, aha.

As always I love how unique the idea is (x2) and the fabulous detail.

Amazing job. :D
<3

I feel cool 'cause I know the radio alphabet. xD
Whiskey Tango Foxtrot! A combat story! You don't see many of those around. And because it's so different, I'mma keep track of it fa sho'. :D

Interesting hahaha

What are you talking about, you can't write? That was really good!
I only read the first chapter, but it really pulled me in.
You have an interesting plotline, which is always good.
You description was good too.
And I love the layout.
Good job. (:

Well, the fact that I dont understand some of this takes away from the fact that I absolutley love the plot!
This is just as fantastic as it was when I first read it.

"Not too sure on this one... Thoughts?
Updated today just for edelgrace ^.^"

Awehh! :3 For some reason I feel special aha. =]
Back to the story...
GADSFDYN! Right now I'm sitting in this check in lodge and I very audibly gasped a couple of times while reading this. The people looked at me weirdly. Thank you so much for the update! But you didn't have to updated just because of me. ^^"

I'm so glad Hypo is alive... So far. XP Right now, I think I'm just reading your story for the sake of reading. And I absolutely love it.

You detail is amazing.
Oh mon dieu!
You have an epic way with descriptions, that much is sure.
The two newest chapters definitely moved the plot along.
I can't wait to read more.

Okay, this is amazing.
It's so different / original from I've anything ever read on here!
All the descriptions you put in are also very vivid, so I could picture everything.
I'm looking forward to the next update! (:

This is really good for someone who 'cant write' as you put it.

Am i the only one who didnt like the layout? I dont think it goes with this.

I felt so comfortable reading this. You have no idea. Im used to this type of thing because of JROTC. I love it.

Im subcribing as soon as i get on the computer. Im currently on my phone XD

Amazing

Mibba needs more war stories <3

This is great. The characters are believable, the combat atmosphere is well-developed, the only thing I could suggest is make sure all of your paragraphs are double-spaces, as sometimes you miss a line. That's really it though, the writing and development of the plot and characters itself is sound.

Well done =]

Chapter two was brilliant; again, it was raw and energetic. Very fast-paced, and the different format of the italics split it neatly without distracting from the events of the main story.

By the way, is the layout new? I'm pretty sure it is, and I must say, it makes the story look much more professional; lovely.

I love the plot. :)
It's very unique and creative.
And you're and ah-mazing writer. I'm jealous *narrows eyes*
Update soon!
:D

Wow, this is extremely different (: I agree with the others though - the grammar and spacing is a tad bit off, but overall, it's very good. I'm subbing, lol! Can't wait to see the next update!

You have a very interesting plot here. :) It could fo rizzle go places. I didn't notice any grammar mistakes. Definite plus. Good job.