Her Biggest Mistake - Comments

Just one bottle of poison did the job. She was dead before her second bite. Rest in peace, Carrie O’Shea. The whore
I loved that line, it showed how brutal and angry the woman was with Carrie.
I loved the concept as well, it was interesting. And it wasn't too vague, it gave us enough detail to determine that her husband had cheated with Carrie.
All in all, this was fantastic <3

I loved it,very captaviating.

I really liked this. I hadn't expected what happened! I really liked how you described everything, and how you revealed everything slowly, even though it was a short story. I honestly don't knwo how you pulled it off. I liked how i could really picture the whole situation. I can't believe she killed her, with poison none the less! Anyways, great job! It was very fun to read.

ahh love this layout!
the title is what brought me in at first though
wow, she's dead already, i do like that diea
but I'm not interested to know how she did die
whoa, she killed the bitch with poisoning,
damn, Carrie doesn't play around at all!
loved the ending, how you explained her lips
and that it's a kind of theme in the story
i really liked this, as others have said, this is epic :D

That was epic.
I loved the recurring theme of red. And I didn't expect the dead girl to be the whore either! If this was a long story i would definitely read the whole thing.
I think the wife is awesome, :)

Holay chiznits. I wasn't expecting the ending.
Dude, your topic was lipstick and burger buns, and you came up with this?! Genius! Genius I say!
I loved how the chick was described, like, how she was lying there, dead. It just, gah, sounds like something horrible, but in a good way. (:
It all flowed really nicely. I liked it.
Amazing job. <3

Damn.
I was not expecting the dead chick to be a whore, nor was I expecting the reasons for her death. As short as that was, I thought it expressed a lot and I loved every word.

This line really captured me for some reason: Especially when that little cross dangled off her neck like a fish hook. It gave me a real visual which I always love to have in stories.

This was strikingly amazing. <3

That was... interesting?
It was different from most I've read,
But it was good.
It had a nice plot that fit the length perfectly.

Good luck!:]

This was really great :]
Very well written, and I loved the story line to it, however short it was.
Well done :]