October 4th, 2010 at 02:24am
I found it amusing! I liked that Hermione was the one to find it, 'cause really, if that happened, she would be the one to do so (even if by accident). XD
Also, about half-way through, one of your italics didn't work...you've a / before the first i.
I'm just going to go through the scoring thing and let you know how you did by that ^o^
10/10 for grammar/spelling
-I didn't catch any mistakes, except for the coding error, which really isn't grammar, so it doesn't count.
8/10 for a readable layout
-It was readable, but the boarders were a bit distracting, as was the font colour.
30/30 for relevancy to the title
-Completely relevant to the title -nod-
40/50 for originality/creativity
-This is also where I evaluate your writing. The inclusion of the Horcruxes was a really interesting idea and made the plot work wonderfully. It just seemed a little rushed and I wasn't too sure about how you made Harry and Ron's characters. Hermione was good though. And the idea of Harry and Ron adventuring in Egypt was an amusing thought.
Overall:
88/100