This is my last comment if no one else comments. Don't worry I will message you. But to continue on my comments... The scene I was refering to was the fighting scene where bella used a mind sheild. Question: How long are you going to contiue your story? Can I email you story formats just so you have ideas for your next chapters? And some reason I can't figure out how the title relates to the story but then agian im slow
I love this! YOU MUST UPDATE FOR MY SAKE!! lls.Mom is making me go to bed now so I'll do my normal long comments. BTW Chapter 13 is Chapter 14.
Man I really want to comment so I'll be brief and tell you the rest later... I want the father to be more involved in the girl's life. Ideas for the fighting scene. I would really love it if you DIDN'T have the same scene as in the book breaking dawn. (Wait nvm that cant happen because Bella isn't a vampire yet) And does the girl have 2 special powers. Can you have her almost perfect them or perfect them enough for her to win the battle. Yes she should win the battle but they would be back to get her, Bella and Bella's child and the girl's child (if she has one at the time) and It'll be more intense. But if you're not planing to make this story go on forever then the suggestion is bad. I'll help you out anytime.
But I have to go to bed before my mother suspects anything. so nite! ;-)
LOVE this story too!! only thing is I'm only on Chapter 2 so I cant fully update and My mom HATES when I'm on the computer so if I don't finish tonight (and able to comment) I will fully comment monday. btw this was a pleasnt surprise of a different and interesting story. Never knew what it was about