Pandora Halliwell Enters True Blood - Comments

I really love this story so please please please update soon!

I really like how you've done your story and how it's based on Trueblood with only Charmed in their occasionally. Keep writing, your good :3

okay, this is a interesting story..but i have no idea what your doing with it.
why dont you try and make paragraphs? this is in third person so its fine to jump people but when you jump and not make a paragraph it gets confusing.
also, why dont you try and italicize the thoughts of the people? if you dont know how then its [ i ] text [ / i ]
I love the idea of the story so dont feel to offended and stop writing it, i like how you kinda worked in the True Blood/Halliwell thing, just make sure you balance them out, like part true blood, part charmed. not TB TB oh toss in some charmed, TB TB TB charmed.