Elisa's Lullaby - Comments

I can't even... Aliyah, seriously. Oh my lord. This was stunning. It was concise, and it was beautiful, really.

Unique.
Perfectly executed.
Lovely.
WOW.

Your layouts are ALWAYS great, Aliyah, and this was no exception.

/APPLAUSE.

'Cause you and this deserve it.

Your narrative skills are fantastic. I read this awhile ago, and kept up with it in RTS, and I've finally decided to leave a comment. :3

I really really loved it. It's so unique and the plot, however concise, was really interesting. It's a perfect example of your style and skill. :)

I know this is a crappy, too-short comment, but if you'd like me to leave a more detailed review, just ask!

This was such a beautiful story. I absolutely LOVED the contrast all throughout it. The rough sex and the sweet love. The barriar of language, but the simple understanding of love. The vintage carpet and couch compared to the litterbox. I just loved that.

There were so many emotions in this too. It was so powerful. The writing was so beautiful. it probably came out of a brand name cereal box or something of that sort. I just love this and all your descriptions. It's all really beautiful.

The ending was cute and wonderful. It left me smiling. You are such a fantastic writer, Aliyah!

Okay, so being the stalker that I am, I read some excerpts from when you were playing the "Rate The Story Game". All day that day I tried to find this story because I wanted to know more. Then my dumb-self read your post more clearly and found out it wasn't an official story yet. So I had to make do, you know reading extended excerpts and such.

Can I tell you that I love this story, even if it is a short story? It's the most weird-yet-lovely love story I have ever heard of. I love how you write, throwing in random decriptions that aren't supposed to be there, but you make it work. I'm glad you finished it, even if the ending was rushed. It still came out bloody good. :}

I really liked this, the descriptions were dead on. I love thick detail like this and I saw everything you've written. I have a story with a character named Elisa too. I just wish you didn't say throbbing member, I thought dick would of been a better word because the layout and tone of the story was bittersweet and gritty. I still thought you did an amazing job with this :)

I'm really glad it had a happy ending and I loved the last line. Very sad and short and sweet but I liked it.

That was really a wonderful story. It was a sweet story - despite the heavy content - it came off as this wonderful little love story. I'd agree with your author's note, the end was a little rushed but honestly, it was a great little story and I think you owe it to your story and characters to extend the ending a bit.

It's quite unique since it actually tries to do something different with the characters aside from your bog-standard scene queens and kings as characters. They felt real, which is quite a feat considering that it was a short story.

Wonderful.

Is that all there is?!?!??!?!? i really loved it!!!!