September 26th, 2010 at 05:29pm
I hope that this Mary is in a hospital, getting the right treatment because gawsh, does she sound depressed. Powerful stuff, as obviously stated before me, and wonderfully written. Again, you already know how much a fan I've become of your [perfectly lengthed] descriptions.
The memories that you had her think and rewind to are really touching, because its those kinds of memories that we'll remember, even after it's all gone. It's all about the little things, ain't it? You did a marvelous job at this, anyhow, and I know that writing should certainly be a career option for you; because you'll succeed in every way possible.
*I understand that lengthed isn't really a word but meh...
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I really love this. It's powerful yet not overpowering to the reader. It's detailed yet not so much so where all I can focus on is unwraveling the pretty ribbon to see the gift inside. It's thick and yet it just works. :)
I could really feel the gravitiy of every thing as I read and I feel like I honeslty walked away with a smidgeon of this forever engraved in my heart. The never lose hope at the end was a nice touch. :) I think my heart was about to break, however, when I read the line that went something like this: but what is there to fight for, when there's nothing left That's not an exact quote, aha. I paraphrased. :)
This really was a lovely little shortie. Hard hitting with tangible emotio and amazing detail. It was perfect. :D I should read more of your works.<3