The saying in writing is "less is more" when it comes to word usage, and I think you found the perfect balance in this piece. This is not the type of writing one would describe as "flowery," and that's why it's great. You don't need a whole slew of adjectives, because you found the perfect word- "magic". And this story doesn't rely on visual imagery so much as it does feeling and emotion, and as a reader, that makes a big impact on me. Most people have ridden a ferris wheel before- we know what things look like and we don't want a story to tell us that, but your grasp and magnification of the feeling of riding is interesting, and it's exactly what a reader wants.
April 24th, 2012 at 04:46am