September's Mourning - Comments

I'm tearing up right now. Must...not...cry...
This is absolutely beautiful. I have no other words to describe it.

"You always said that death isn’t for forever, remember?"

That's where I lost it.

You cried writing it? I cried reading it. I don't know if it helped or not that I was listening to a 9/11 tribute song at the time.

But I agree with Ava Marie. I'm speechless

Dude. This. is. the. best. thing. everrrrr.
A seriously impressive heart-jerker in ever appeal.

It was so sad, so tragic, so real. I really do wonder how many wives or significant others were calling their others/spouses, thickly hoping with all their hearts that they were okay. And the children, man. </3. Poor Kids.

This is seriously unique in every aspect. I don't think anyone has written a story about this tragedy and honestly, after reading this, I don't think that if they did they could impress me quite as much as you have. I was crying while reading this, aha.

This was intense and deserves so many more comments informing you of it's amazing-ness.

Fabulous Job. I'm pretty much speechless.

A story about 9/11 - very, very original. I agree with the blinding. From someone living outside of America, and with so much emotion, this is sheer brilliance.

"Tell me you’re not at the office," Rachel said.
^I wonder how many people asked their loved ones that exact same question that day.

The wonderful way that you've pulled the emotion and condensed it into the dialogue was amazing. Very talented. It made me tear up a little; because I remember this day like it was just yesterday. Miles away, across the South Pacific, our country came to stand still too when the news slashed images of the carnage across our screens. It was as if everyone was just holding their breaths.

This was wonderfully written; really.

Brava!

This was very sad, yet very true. I watched a documentary on 9/11 this year, and the live footage showed women getting phone calls from their husbands in the towers. I loved this. The emotions were shown amazingly, and I felt like I was there. 9/11 was a terrible tragedy, and there aren't enough stories about it on the site.

Wow, sorry it took so long to comment.
My eyes started tearing up. Any more writing and I would've let them slip.
As soon as I started reading it I thought, "twin towers?'
I used to live in New york, and I could see them from my house.
I had a family friend in the tower.
The part where Micheal was talking to his daddy and hearing the story I think was the real tear jerker.
This was the saddest one shot in my contest.

Oh my God. This is actually the best thing I have ever read on here.
I actually cried, I have never cried reading a story on here before.
Wow.
It was so amazing.
Was this 9/11 or something cos that's the impression I got?
Damn, this is so awesome.
Sorry for the shit comment but I have honestly nothing else to say. Amazing job <3

I cried while reading this...for two reasons, one, because of the emotions that you so amazingly portrayed within that small chapter. the overwhelming notion of an early and unwanted demise, but that love that would forever linger from the departed. well done.

and the second, well, i remember that day like nothing else. i was sitting in my high school spanish class when the announcement was made, i was fifteen when that happened. then the moment you mentioned, the towers falling, i was sitting in my world history class, the entire room of about twenty-four teenagers and one adult, the silence that surrounded us that day as we watched such an atrocious event unfold right in front of us--those emotions were brought back as i read this.

i think you did a rather decent job with this piece. it's an overwhelming event to attempt a story from, but i think you did well. you made it seem real, like that could've actually happened to one of the thousands that died that day...well we know that happened to a few from the news feeds that day, but still, i think you did well.

I almost cried reading this 2 :'( But I kept strong for micheal haha. Update!

I cried reading this.

It was just so tragic, you could really feel the emotions of the characters they were all portrayed beautifully. They didn't feel like characters, exactly, they felt like real people, it made me really consider real people that might be in that situation. Truly heart wrenching.

Your writing is brilliant.

THIS IS SO SAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAADDDDDDDD!!!!!!!!!

So, I was trying to read this out loud, just whispering to myself because it's the only way that I can concentrate tonight, and by the end, my voice was cracking so bad I couldn't do it anymore. I literally had tears in my eyes!

It was so wonderful though. You know I always love how you capture the emotions of the individuals in a situation. It's easy to not feel anything if you just consider it in a group mentality, but, once you get right down to the individual and you start thinking about them, you start feeling like you knew them personally. You feel that heart wrenching pain.

I'm still choked up. You have no idea.

Well you do. You wrote it. But you take my meaning.

This was wonderful. I love you, and I love your writing.