What's Worth Fighting For? - Comments

I can definitely see the Linken Park in this--the bit with the mirror smashing and what not. I always wonder how they always manage to smash the mirrors so easily. That stuff is hard to break and it hurts to hit. It's like, SMASH--I feel no pain. That's bull shit. Just like, how the fuck can they kick out that car window so easily? *sigh*

I really liked the emotion you put into this. The self-hatred was depicted very nicely, but I almost felt like she was kind of schizophrenic or something. The way she was screaming at herself and it almost seemed as if her reflection smiled while she did not--you know what I mean? It was interested the twists you put...but I feel like the ending left...well little to be desired[I think that's the wrong use of words]. Like I felt like it just kind of ended without much of an...ending. Do you get what I mean?

I still liked it though. :)

I absolutely love the emotion you put into this story. It made me mad and sad, which is a good thing. Not most stories can make me feel what the character is feeling, but yours did. I love the description and the way you worded things was beautiful. Good job, love. You have talent.

I haven't heard the song this is supposed to be related to so I write this comment with no prior knowledge. In all honesty, it annoyed me a little (the character's extreme self hate, not the story) but then I had to remind myself that life is long and the world is big and that what people did to themselves were of no business of mine.

It didn’t shatter like they do on the movies, though the pain from my knuckles stunned some thought into me.
^ Well, duh, it's called pain.

This made me want to grab the girl from the screen and personally shake some sense into her head. Urgh!

Wonderful piece of work, truly.

Hi Fionnuala – After reading that other story of yours and falling in love I had to come back for another one. God, you are talented! Love the banner, love the layout, love the story – Hell, I loved it all. I don’t know Lincoln Park really so I didn’t realize it was a song fic but I thoroughly enjoyed it even with my ignorance. You’re able to capture so much emotion in your pieces even though they’re short, which impresses me – you don’t need sixty seven chapters to convey emotion, you just go for it. You are so talented, I can’t believe I’ve known you for such a long time and am only recently beginning to indulge in your work. Great luck in your contest.

Definitely different, and somewhat realistic as well. A few wording mistakes, and I've never been a fan of swearing... I think I saw some somewhere? I don't know. It won't count against you,t hough, I think...
Anyways! Great job of collaborating with the songfic, you did pretty well. I wouldn't necessarily agree with absolutely everything with the lines, but it seemed to do. You kept the story vague about the character and other random details, but that was good to focus on the point you were keeping with right here. The idea was pretty good, and I really liked the details. The yelling, the breaking, the entire scene was well done. It was a good job, and added a little something more to the recently cliched idea.
88/100

I really like this and seemed quite realistic.
The emotions were really good too.
As Bella said, there was no 'breaking the habit' in this really.
It didn’t shatter like they do on the movies, though the pain from my knuckles stunned some thought into me. - That line made it really realistic. Usually the glass would shatter and that doesn't always happen, really but that one line made it real.
Overall, good job :)

First of all, the text in the summary is a bit too light. I didn't even bother trying to read it, because I don't like when you have to highlight text just so you can read something. =/

I did like the story, it was very powerful, but right now I'm listening to the song and I don't feel them matching. A keypoint to the song is, to me, "breaking a habit" - and I don't get the feeling she's doing that at all. I would've loved a twist at the end. Like her doing these things first, and then there's a paragraph at the end where she turns it around. Or just a simple "this would be the last time, from this day on things would be different" or something of the like.

I don't know - that's just how I personally felt about the song and the story. But it's your story, and it's fine as it is. xD

I like this.
It's different from what I normally read.
I don't personally know the song so I'm not sure which part of the story is the lyrics.
I think you did a good job with this.
You've inspired me to expand my horizons and attempt something like this. (:

A little Linkin Park in the summary? Nice. I haven't listened to them in a long time, but their new song isn't that great.

I digress. . . Before I even started.

though the pain from my knuckled stunned some thought into me. Knuckled?

So, picture this story, only with a thirteen-year-old emo. . . XP

I'm sorry. That was mean. I withdraw that comment.

This was very good. I thought it captured the self destruction created by the habit well. It was a very good representation of how someone's own mind can be turned against them if something is left for too long.

Very good.