All in Good Time - Comments

I really, really enjoyed this. I think I'm going to have to read through the whole thing. The only thing I didn't like was the type of font you used. It was just kind of bleb for me. I'm a very shallow reader, meaning I don't read stories if I don't like the look of the layout and that's how I felt for this. --mainly the coloring and the font choice. But otherwise, I adore this story, and I'm going to bring myself to read it again once you're finished.

Awww, poor Scarlett. :/

This was a great update and I'm eager to see what happens now.
<3

This was a great update and I'm eager to see what happens now.
<3

Loooooove those last three chapters!! But what's gonna happen to Scarlett and where willt hey go?

I liked how it started.
In the third chapter, when I read this;
The humans seemed to be low on rotting food today.
I snorted just thinking about them getting good food for once.
In the fourth chapter when you mentioned: Kill the king!
I was like 'yesssssss' haha(:
In chapter five, when she said she was building an army, it was like, dum dum dum!
All intense and everything.
This was great<3
just like your other work

First, I love, love, love the layout and the picture. Both are extremely gorgeous :D Second, I sort of agree with everyone else; it's a little choppy, but honestly, it makes the story a bit more real, haha! I love all the details and emotions here and just everything was beautiful. <3
I'm definitely subbing :D <3

Other than this being a little choppy in parts, I really liked the flow of this. I could grab onto a piece of detail and float away to dreamland, teehee. <3 C:

I love how you opened with that long date. It seems ever so important to know that simple fact. :)

I love the layout and of course you're all amazing and shizz. (;
<3

Good Job. (:

oh dear, oh dear oh dear. I find myself falling in love with your banners, they're all simply gorgeous and I mean it. I wish I had like half the banner making skills that you do.

I loved the short description, it drew me into the story and then the long description drew me into the story as well. I didn't really understand why at the end of it you had the time counting though, it might've just been me though. I thought it was kind of a awkward way to end it, a confusing way too.

Of course that changed when I began to read the story though.

I loved the way that you wrote Lana though, the way you wrote the first chapter was awesome, and I mean it, not a word was out of place and the way you wrote it seemed to flow very well.

Lovely story, I loved the way the first chapter ended (I only read the first chapter) but I'm quite excited where this could go, I'll be back and I mean it! I've never read a fantasy story on Mibba like this before.

Mm, this one was just as fantastic as the other:]
You really have a thing for fantasy.
I'll be looking for an update:]

The beginning was amazing, I have to say. I suppose it's my love for clocks and time <3
And of course, having said that, the layout is beautiful.
I like how you constantly mention time and the hours, and minutes, and through the introduction you tell us that the minutes tick by. It's quite nice. I like it.

Chapter one was simple, but a good way of introducing the characters in the cell. Observance is nice. It's really great how the narrator mentions the small details, instead of the basic things that everyone can notice, and there's a bit of personality and backstories thrown in there as well.

The next chapter is again, quite good. I like how you finish your chapters, always ending in some sort of anticipation, wanting to hear the next chapter.

Good job! And I love it how it's not related to Harry Potter since you have witches in it (Not that I have a problem against Harry Potter, but it does become repititive after a while)

I liked this. It was different. But the layout was gorgeous ♥♥♥♥♥☺☺☺☺☺

This is really amazing, creative and wonderful. This gives off a futuristic vibe, a sort of V for Vendetta type of story - I'm sorry if I'm missing a few things here and there. It's late, haha! Anyhoo, I really can't wait to find out what happens next. Amazing job! <3

I like your stories. They're so creative, and I notice you write about magic quite alot. I like that about your writing.

So yeah, I loved this.

This is so unbelievably unique. I have never read a story about witches that does not involve the Harry Potter fan-fiction universe, and I'm so incredibly happy I chose to comment on this one, because I just smiled through the whole thing. This could work historically, the whole Salem trials and such could go hand by hand with your story, as the unspoken story about the Salem's Witches.

The prologue hooked me up immediately. The narrator's voice was amazing; she gave this vibe of being somewhere between bored and nostalgic, which sums up in her keeping track of the days she last saw daylight. It angered me and made me feel trapped at the same time; there was this small claustrophobic feeling lingering within me because of how you described the living situation of the witches.

I read both chapters and let me tell you, the second one is my favorite by far; it is amazing how you used your main character as a plot device for introducing the other characters, how her scrutinous ways of letting time pass by made way for the rest of the witches, eventually landing on Baylee and the foreshadowing of a future chapter.

I'm going to subscribe to this.

The only grammar mistakes I noticed where those delving with dialogues and tags and beats. I'll do a little example so you can edit later on:

Tags
"We need to escape," she said.
A tag is known as something that accompanies the dialogue, something that's part of it. Things such as he said, she said, he smiled, she smiled, etc that indicate how the person that said the dialogue acted while saying it are considered tags. When there's a tag, a comma precedes the final word of the dialogue, then the end of the quotation marks, then the next word must be un-capitalized, as you can see on my example.

Beats
"We need to escape." There was nothing much to say to her suggestion, yet, her weary eyes awaited for an answer.
Here, a beat is a sentence that does not accompany the dialogue part. In a beat, a period precedes the last word in the dialogue, then the end of the quotation marks, then the following word must be capitalized.

Aside from those little mistakes, your story was flawless and incredibly interesting.

I like this, a lot. I love the characters, the plot, the descriptions.
I love how you wrote a fantasy story, too! I'm so glad I read this (:
Also, I noticed some forecasting (I think that's what it's called) in there.
I'm excited to find out if what's in my mind is right! :D
Brilliant piece of work, just thought I'd say.

xD I always love it when people start stories like you did with this. <3 Thank you for being specific with time - because time is important, and I wonder if some people don't know that, occassionally.

You're really into writing about magic, huh? *Rub chin* Good. We need more people like you.

I remember your first story on the site, and now when I look back on that, I see how much you've grown.
(: You're great, honey. Keep it up. :D

This is very different from a lot of things I've read.
The description is wonderful, and I love all the observations you put toward the other witches in the cell.
I also really loved the counting in the Introduction, it really tied it all together to fit with the title.
Very nice. :]
I will be subscribing.

I like this story very much. Are they going to break out and be on the run? What's going to happen? The story of the little girl was so sad. Why didn't they take her with them?

This is really interesting, I love how you worded a lot of things in the intro, very unique. I don't really think there's a problem with the flow, it reads just fine. Usually I'm not into Original Fics, but I'm interested to see where this goes next. :)

The White Witch thing, reminded me of The Wizard Of Oz or The Chronicles Of Narnia, something along those lines. I love those movies so that just adds to it.