Make It Go Away - Comments

This story is pretty amazing. Just simple enough to not be confusing, and detailed enough to break my heart. You are a very talented writer, and I think I'm going to need to read more of your stories.

The layout adds to the beauty of the story. The picture being of a beautiful woman in a wedding dress, in front of a pink background, makes it seem like, to me at least, like it is her on a pedestal in his heart.

I was so hoping there would be a happy ending, and I do suppose from Eva there is one. But I could really feel his heart break. And that is a sign of fantastic writing.

I think you portray just the right amount of depression and desperation with Sebastian's yearning for her, it was simply written with such an underlying tone of sadness I grew to love with the time it took me to read your one-shot. You are a gifted writer, people just can't learn to write like you do. Never, ever stop writing because you are truly in your element and I am so blessed to have read this!!

Wishing you all the best,

Olivia

This was absolutely stunning. Mibba definitely needs more writing like this. I'm not usually into romantic, unrequited love stories, but this one made want to smile and cry at the same time. Your characters are amazing, so detailed and thought through. You are an amazing writer and this was absolutely beautiful. So simple, but so stunning. I loved it; I'm so glad Comment Swap brought me here :)

This is a really pretty layout! I like the light pink color and the banner picture. I like how the words are narrower, that's nice as well.

I don't understand why she's crying :/. And is Sebastian like her friend or brother? Nope, best friend, figured that one out haha. Oh gosh, she's getting married, and he's in love with her. That's gotta bite, hard. Aww! That's so adorable! He made soemthing for her a long time ago, and now he's giving it to her :]. Sucks for Sebastian, I can tell how much he lvoes her ande wants her. You did a wonderful job with this :]

I really enjoyed reading this man. I could practically feel his aching heartbreak. It felt so surreal and saddening. Poor Sebastian :'(
Lovedd it!

Lovely. I usually don't like stories that center on same-sex couples, but you handled it with such tenderless and care that it made me forget they were both the same gender.

Your writing is warm, like you've known your characters all your life, and it's something mibba needs more of.

Splendid job!

I loved this, it was amazing and just...was perfectly done.
Amazing work m'dear.

That was simply gorgeous. Your writing is magnificent, and it was very...I don't know the word for it, but a little more than "cute". It was the sort of thing one would say "aw" to. You know? It was beautiful.

Well done.

Dr.

I liked it, again thanks for the entry. :)

Her hand went up to her eyes and she quickly wiped some tears away. She stood up and walked over to the mirror, examining herself. She was dressed in gray sweatpants and a baggy t-shirt. It didn’t match with her curly hair which was gathered at the top and flowed down past her shoulder. Her make-up had been done, but there was little streaks of black coming down for her glossy blue eyes.
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We sounded like your typical cliché romance, but we aren’t going to have a happy ending. She’s getting married later today and I’ll be sitting there watching, smiling and clapping for the two of them. He was a nice guy; the sweet, funny charming type, but he wasn’t me.

I love your style of writing. I found it adorable.
This was like a pure orgasm. Just saying. (: <3

Personally, I was a little gender confused while reading. :/
The person speaking... is a guy, correct?
For some reason, the pink background made me think it was chick-ish. Maybe that's just my messed up mind though. x(

This is adorable. I've read stories with the same sort of plot, boy in love with his best friend. But it was nice to see it in a different setting. Instead of like at a party or something he is watching her get married. That's both bitterly sweet, and just sad.

Loved it. :)

Awh :)
This is so sweet. You did a great job of it.

This was just tooooooo sweet.<3
Some of the things just broke my heart, but others, they made it whirl like a bird. :)

Amazing Job.<3 :D

The crayon heart! *swoons* That was so adorable.
I liked the guy's POV. And the non-cliche part was good. :D
I found a few grammar mistakes, however, that made it a little bleh.
‘Care to go for a walk? It’ll clear your mind.”
That should be a " in the beginning, I believe.

IO reached into my pocket and wrapped my fingers around the delicate paper and pulled it out.
Just I, perhaps?

“Would you mind taking me back now? I don’t think it looks good to be late for your own wedding. I laughed and turned around, driving back to her apartment.
Quote marks whenever she stops talking?

But otherwise, it was good, and kinda heartbreaking. But in a good way, you know?
The layout, I'm not the biggest fan of. but the picture at the top fits perfectly.
Overall, great. :)

Aw, poor guy. In love with his best friend and having to watch her get married.

I really liked the added touch of the crayon heart. I really liked how he was sort of putting himself out there with it (even if he was outrageously late), and she did not exactly reject him outright, but she just sort of ignored it. I couldn't imagine that added little tidbit on my wedding day. "Oh, by the way, I love you." XP

I really liked the way you wrote this. It flowed well and it kept me interested the whole time. I also like that it was from the perspective of the other guy rather than the girl getting married. It was a nice change from what you see a lot of times. Or, the change that he didn't stop the marriage. Too many times you see stories about a last minute love confession that somehow changes everything.

Great job.

I didn't like how thin the layout was but nevermind. The banner was quite cute so that's good.

Anyway, the detail in this was lovely and the title capture my attention and made me want to read :} Your writing style is amazing, well done. <3