I like how short this is and how there are a lot of things left unsaid, which works in a really great way. :) I think the piece is super descriptive and captures the beauty in Catholic Churches (even if the story is shrouded in a misery of sorts), I like that you at least present things in beautiful manner. Then I think the contrast also works quite well; the church and then what the character starts to feel and how everything just seems to look down on her. I think that's well done. Most of all though, I think the lines of dialogue spoken are probably maybe the 'best'(?) thing about the short piece because in saying them, there's a reassurance that this isn't some god-hating/Catholic-hating/Catholics down people's throats kind of story, there's something more to it which makes you wonder why the words were uttered and what are the pasts these people share. It's a well-written piece. :)
April 4th, 2012 at 10:56pm