The Low Road For The Fast Track - Comments

what the?!
don't stop there.
why must you do that?!

love! Hope it didn't end there though, do a follow up! >(:

oaft, me likes!
need more soon please! x

First thing that I want to say, you don't need to have one shot in your story title, it can actually get your stories reported instead. Instead of putting it there, put it in the short description as well as the search tags, you'll probably get more readers =)

Like the background though, simple but really pretty =)

Summary, short sweet to the point, nothing wrong with that, again like it.

The story itself, for the most part it flowed really well and you did a wonderful job of writing it, I thought it was extremely well written.

A few parts of it were awkward though, they sounded awkward to read.

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He did not want to bang just any girl who flirted with him.

It sounds good I mean, but I think it would sound better if you wrote didn't instead of the two seperate words.

That actually appeared a few times in the story, but like I said I thought that other then those little things it was just wonderfully written.

I loved the way he talked to himself, you made him seem really realistic in that way because I know that lots of people (myself included) talk to themselves.

But it was just a wonderful job of writing this, and I can't write slash or smut to save my life so I thought this was wonderful.

Watchout for those awkward sounding sentances and your stories will be perfect =)