Proposal - Comments

This was a good read, very well written and virtually no mistakes. The only thing I would suggest more of is description, the majority of the text was speech but the bits where you did describe were very, very good. The characters were believable, the speech was very natural and had really good pacing.

What a heartbreaker. I didn't expect Kristen to fully come out with "Hey, I've been cheating on you!" And that was sad.

I also liked how you wrapped up with the dinner starting to burn, which to me, is kind of like a symbol of his failed attempt to be with her, in a way.