Of Rhinos & Griffins - Comments

There are no words to express how much I love you. You are absolutely amazing and I just can't even begin to so yh I won't. Loved cette chapitre, and I will go over my more favouriter bits of it when I'm not commenting off my phone. Much love for you.
<3<3<3<3 you genius girl.

Lulz, except I could totally see Tennant as emo

This chapter was just I mean, I loved the random arguements, but the undertone was just... so well-done, and really, really sad. I really want to know what happened now, though... that had BETTER be in there!

YES POST THE PREQUAL FLUFF! It needs to be done!

And character interations make my day... just sayin'... Oh, and so do you. But really, you more make my life, Leisha

GASP! How dare you sully the name of Russel T Davies! :o Mostly because I always feel like with Moffat he's either trying to put too many ideas into one episode, or he forgets to include anything about the actual plot of the season, then stick in details at the end, as if it makes up for it. Plus, after watching series one again, it's as if he stole half his ideas from that series.

Rant over. XD

He didn’t think anyone could get into as heated an argument about something as admittedly trivial as a TV show I regularly do get into heated arguments about the writers of Doctor Who. XD

CALLING DAVID TENNANT EMO!? WELL, I NEVER! *sticks up nose*

I am definitely in Nikesh's corner for this one!

BAHA! I totally use David Tennant to win arguments. . . Not that I check beforehand to see if he would really support my side of the argument. Usually it's things like, "I called up David Tennant, and he said you suck."

Rhys can’t help the grin that spreads onto his face. “Yeah, seriously. We stole it... well, borrowed it. We were always going to give it back.” I loled at this. ^_^

I was holding back fangirlish giggles the entire time I was reading this. . . And I'm in a dorm room right now. . . With my roommate. . . And the door open.

Chapter five is amazing. It flows really well, and you can really see the characters start to develop more, and flesh out. And I have a suspision of what that message in Benny's bag might be.

I really like how Merryn and Rhys stick up for Bennedict; he's such an adorable character. And it really shows how close they are.

Talking about Bennedict, is he autistic?

Nikesh takes it from him, hiding a smile, and has the sudden, not entirely unexpected feeling that the four of them are going to be fantastic friends.

(It’s kind of a very nice feeling, really.)
Dawww! Sweetest line in the world!

I'm looking forward to this band story, it sounds amazing!

Keep up with the amazing work, this story is one of my favourites.

*legasp* There was a hint of a potential plot! BREAK THE CODE, BENEDICT!!!

Speaking of Benny, he's so lovable I just want to give him the biggest hug xD He's so freaking adorable. And his sonic screwdriver... that better come into play!

LULZ I just love them all. I'm still not sure what to think of Remy though. He's a fence character for now, until someone can convince me of his awesomeness or his evil.

Oh and Rhys... he's such a Ron xDDDDDD Benedict has nice eyes... sound familiar? "Hermione's got nice skin..." Yeaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhh

I demand a story about this magical band involving an accordian. That sounds AMAZING

And I'm totally jealous that YOUR orchestra is band+orchestra and ours isn't. JEALOUS!!!!!!!

:D :D :D :D <3
Love love love.... I love you and this story

My review of Gatsby: Gatsby is a creepy stalker with no sense of self control (Needless to say, I agree with Remy). The end. XD Seriously, he creeped me out through the whole thing. Good book though. ^_^

Anyway. Back to the story at hand. I think you already know I adore this story. I just find it so amusing. It's got all of those things that I love. Especially the literary references and jokes. . . And of course the Doctor Who references. Those always make me happy.

I like Benedict. His innocence and awkwardness are cute. XD

a fob watch, a bow tie, a sonic screwdriver BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! . . . I got a sonic for Christmas from my friend Matt. :D I was happy. Also, I want Benedict's bag. It sounds like the ultimate bag of awesomeness, pretty much.

Off to read the little twitter thing you did with them now! Sure it will be hilarious!

And what's this? A plot, you say? AMAZING! XD

I love this. Like, I really, really love it.

I love how crazily prepared Benedict is in the first chapter, with the pencils and sharpies and rulers and playing cards and stuff. And I love how much the characters argue with each other. It's very realistic, because I know a lot of friends who argue with each other. And it's very funny, so bonus points there.

I love how adorably nerdy they all are. Seriously, you don't get enough stories about nerds. And I love how it's not just stereotypically accademic nerdiness, but stuff like them loving Doctor Who and Star Trek as well. (And Firefly!!!) And I love how Merryn interigates Nikesh to see if he's worthy enough to join their nerdiness.

“On Wednesdays we wear Spock ears.”
Loving the Mean Girls-inspired line there.

Remmy sounds so utterly heart-meltingly adorable! I actually want to marry him. Like, really badly. And I like how Merryn tries desperately to rationalize her reaction to seeing him and getting flustered; it's really cute.

I also like how you had the characters talk about Clegg and Camerion, it really helps with the story setting. Plus I like reading/hearing teenagers talk about politics, because there doesn't seem to be that many teens nowadays interested.

Merryn fangirling about the microwave is also very funny, and totally what happened at my sixth-forth (oh, the exicitement when we were allowed a kettle...)

Rhys' dream at the beginning of chapter four is simply brilliant. It's funny, completely wacky and has that flow that dreams often have. And I like how you kept the water-alarm-system that Merryn set up. (So points for consistincy).

The whole glitter-shower-gel is amazing. The girl screaming "Edwaaaard!" brought a smile to my face. Really, it was fab. Loved it. (Also loved how the others made fun of it for most of the chapter).

“Would it kill you to get your mind of the gutter for five minutes?” Rhys pleads, when he’s sure he’s not about to die of embarrassment. “Seriously?”

“But it’s so comfortable here,” Nikesh replies, voice innocent and eyes wide.
I think those lines summs up the majority of six-formers. (And I love Rhys and Nikesh's dirty C# conversation.

Loving how Rhys tries and fails so hard to convince Nikesh he doesn't like Benny. It's very adorable.

“No singing in assembly. Fifty points from Griffyndor.”
Again, that made me smile. Harry Potter-related lines for the win!

So yeah, I'm really loving this story so far. I love how each chapter starts with a nerdy-ish quote that somehow relates to it, and I think the banner and layout are amazing. So yeah, I'm definately subcribing.

So let me begin this extended comment:
FIRSTLY. I'm very angry at you for updating this story before I commented chapter three because I was actually looking forward to airing my political views on that. So suffer the wrath of my supreme commenting skills!!!! FAZAHAHASHAHA
Srry 'bout dat.
SECONDLY. You don't actually have to read all of it because it is EXTREMELY long and containing of comments to both chapters although each comment is actually just me saying 'omgsh me 2 srsly wow omgsh'.

DOUGLAS ADAMS QUOTE! I have so much love for you :) <3

Politics. As I said yesterday in form 'I am politics'. Not that I take it or anything, but everyone who does say they think that I should have. I can get very overbearing with my views sometimes :') I feel like I take it.

I like Merryn's repellent, and the use of 'foolish notion'. My friend told me about a book where the letter 'o' is outlawed by pirates so they have to say 'flish' instead of 'foolish'. So I was reading that going 'haha flish notions lulzzzz' like an idiot.

Imma take this moment to warn you that I am so with Merryn about EVERYTHING in this chapter, no lie, so yh. RS. Shitest subject known to man. I know you like it, sorry. But I hate it with a burning passion (SPASSION- sorry that will make no sense to you but I can't help myself).

I like her 'about to answer a particularly complex maths question' state- it's brilliant and reminds me of La Parure.
Also, I like Remy. I know you're (probably =P ) too classy to have them see each other in the common room at lunch/break or to have the same frees but I want to see him more TT.TT this is cruel torture.

And now to the true ranting. I hate Nick Clegg. He's such a slimy twat. And Cameron is a jammy bastard. Srsly, the both of them are such huge pricks. And unlike the rest of the student population of the world (apparently) I never liked Clegg and I haven't believed in the Lib Dem's ability to rule the country ever since I learnt anything halfway decent about politics. They're far too wishy washy, neither here nor their. I'm a die hard labour fan and I liked Gordon Brown. And The Guardian.
Ahem.
Also Ed Miliband seems marginally less of a bumbling hoddypeak than the rest of them
Bumbling hoddypeak. Hoddypeak. I HAVE SO MUCH LOVE FOR YOU. I don't think I tell you this nearly enough but you are an absolute genius.

Remy’s eyes narrow at the abrupt change of subject, but he doesn’t question it, and for that she is grateful. “English and History,” he replies instead. “I kind of want to do History at university, but I might end up doing PPE instead. What about you?”
Okay so Remy just sounds like he might just be living the life of myself and EVRY OTHER PERSON I KNOW. Well, except all those people who are doing pure sciences *coughLEISHAcough*.

unless you’re building a time machine on top of your house or in your vintage DeLorean
You know, I've never liked those films. I think I'm the only person in the world who doesn't. I don't even think I have a reason for disliking them.

“So, uh,” she says, clearing her throat pointedly, “Conservative ideals? Values? Do they actually have any?”
AMEN. Bloody tories :@

You know, I honestly had no idea obituaries were still a thing that anything other than parish newspapers had. And i didn't even know that parishes were still in functioning existence until the other day when the lady up the road started talking about the parish pastor. Srsly, I live in a little bubble of NOTHING AT ALL.

“Here I am, face to face with a situation I never thought I’d ever see, it’s strange, how a dress could take a mess and make her nothing less than beautiful to me...”
Thought you might want to know that everything from this section to the divider is in italics. Don't know if that was purposeful avant guarde hispter shit with the layout or just an accident, although I think it's the latter...?

They walk out together, wheeling their bikes along with them down the drive. Benedict veers off the path and nearly collides with a tree, but Merryn grabs him and hauls him back before he can make impact.
He is too ridiculously adorable. You should stop doing that with your characters, it's not fair on me who like to be able to pinch REAL cheeks rather then just have to imagine pinching fictional cheeks >_< :@
Although I do empathise with poor Benny. I can't walk very straight either, it's such a curse.

CHAPTER FOUR (finally!!!)

I love Rhys dream. It's actually amazing although it did disorient my brain a little, and has just done so again. It feels like my brain is elsewhere leaving me a mindless zombie.

I love how he automatically assumes that the glitter is Merryn's fault. I also love that he's COVERED in the stuff XD I think that's brilliant, and also that that glitter shower gel would make a valuable purchase for if I go to a uni where I have to share a bathroom... hahaha!! >:D

Rhys glances around the common room, tugging self-consciously at his collar. Merryn and Nikesh exchange amused looks – she delighted in telling him about Rhys’s predicament the minute he walked in, being the cold-hearted fiend that she is – and Benedict just looks confused. He doesn’t really get the Twilight thing; the whole phenomenon has kind of gone right over his head, really.
Ever more love for Benedict. How can be so dskkzcdjEFAFVJMBÏRWRSGDUVXK 9sw4efd c, srsly? He's like a little kitten. If I were Merryn I would be totally mothering him PERMANENTLY. He is more in need of mothering then my good self, which is crazy!

“I think it looks nice,” Benedict says, loyally. “The glitter, I mean. It makes your skin look all pretty and stuff.”
I mean really woman! What a cutie! <3!!

Nikesh throws a questioning glance in Rhys’s direction, but Merryn gets up suddenly and throws out a hand that catches him in the chest, and he’s momentarily distracted by his sudden inability to breathe. “Is that- Have they- Is that a microwave I see two Year Thirteens carrying in?!”
Way to go Merryn! I also incapacitate many of my male friends- mostly by accident- and it's always hilarious, although I feel awful about it because I have conscience ><
Also, supremely jealous of them, getting a microwave! We desperately need them! We have the whole overpriced food dilemma also! Mind if I enrol into this school???
Really, can I? I would like to make friends with Merryn! I know I'd irritate the shit out of her though XD haha.

“What is the point, then?” Nikesh doesn’t look mocking, just curious. “’Cause from where I’m sitting, it looks like you want to take a ride on his light sabre, if you know what I mean.”
Good grief, woman! STAR TREK innuendo! I have a feeling Merryn would be proud, if she were there...
I love the geeky plotlessness of this! Also, I'm looking forward to that geeky party you mentioned... :D

Nikesh gives Rhys a sideways look, his eyebrows hitching upwards. “So you wouldn’t like eating Rhys’s meat, then?”
My reaction has not changed a jot since my first reading of this.
CHRIST, NIKESH! Give the guy a break!!!!

“Holy-” Rhys scrambles up out of his chair and flees, just as the girl lunges towards him, with something that sounds somewhat like a cross between a battle cry and a fervent ‘EDWAAAAARD’, excessive vowels included.
LOL!!! I'm so glad this will be an extended joke, the world needs more twihard attacks. I actually lol'd when I read that :')

“Welcome, welcome, for another year at Highgate!” their headmaster, a cheerful, mild-mannered man, is saying. “My name is Mr Richter, and I am headmaster of Highgate.”
Fun fact: Highgate was the name of my old school. Well, actually, Highgate Woods was the name of my old school, Highgate's the name of the private school nearby. BUT THAT'S NOT THE POINT.
How is he so cheerful? I don't get it. It's crehyziness.

And that’s their loss, Rhys always thinks defiantly, because once you get past the prickliness and the haughtiness and the tendency towards causing grievous bodily harm to those who cause her displeasure, Merryn is awesome. Really, truly awesome.
Siblingly love. Insanely cute, and rare.

“Thou doth protest too much,” Nikesh says, an exaggerated sigh tacked onto the end as if for dramatic effect.

And Rhys wants to stay angry with him, really he does, but the boy has just quoted Shakespeare, Shakespeare, even if it is a ridiculously famous and largely overused line, and Rhys can’t stay angry at anyone when they start quoting good literature.
Well. I know not from where that quote comes. I also hate Shakespeare. Mainly because the only things we ever read in school are tragedies and they are so DULL.
The only thing I really ever quote from Shakespeare is 'HA! I like not that!' from Othello :') I'm such a twit.

Nikesh holds his hands up in surrender. “No more bad jokes about light sabres,” he agrees with a defeated little nod of his head. “I promise.” But then he gets this sly little look on his face that Rhys instantly dreads. “But what say you of sonic screwdrivers?”
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA THIS ALSO HAPPENED TO US. My friend bought in her sonic and my OTHER friend said it looked like a dildo and the joke never really died down and then there's a pic from the DW day on fb where they're both standing in such a way that the sonics can be seen through their legs and the comments are just lol oh gosh :')
I love you.

And I love this story.
And I thank you for writing this story which I love.
And I also love Merryn. May I marry her?

So ends this ridiculously and obnoxiously long comment of mine.

BTW:
Three in a row for no mistakes!

So this comment shall contain a running commentary as I read this update, which I really should do for all your stories xD

-OMFG PIGFARTS RUMBLEROAR DARREN CRISS DRACO AND THE POTTY DRAWING AHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-Rhys sets of my gaydar... is he gay?
-And... is he singing a Time Lord rock song in the shower?
-OMFG HE'S COVERED IN GLITTER OMFG OMFG OMFG THAT'S AMAZING.
-I love the new background xD
-Lulz, he wears guyliner... he DEFINATELY sets of my gaydar xDDDD
-BENEDICT AND RHYS TOTALLY HAVE A BROMANCE GOING ON xDDDD
-“’Cause from where I’m sitting, it looks like you want to take a ride on his light sabre, if you know what I mean.” xDDDDDDDD It's Lady Gaga gone Star Wars xDDD
-I FUCKIN' KNEW IT! I TOLD YOU I HAVE GAYDAR!
“So you wouldn’t like eating Rhys’s meat, then?” LULZ SEXUAL INNUENDO OMFG xDDD
-And the Twihards attack!
-Fuck yeah for "Get Back To Hogwarts" Fifty points to Hufflepuff
-“Wooh, programming,” Nikesh says, voice dry. - I think this kid is me in male,fictionalresiding in your mind form
-I assume you've taken programming then? Or at least, harrassed someone who has into giving you information? xD
-OMFG YES I WANT TO HEAR SONIC SCREWDRIVER JOKES xDDDDD
-Fuck no. I love that dream. I want to have that dream *begins begging subconcious*

So yeah... broadcast of the mind of Jennie... over!

Erm, well there were many points of awesome in this chapter which I shall return to comment on, probably at rambly length but for now I will just say:

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Rhys glances around the common room, tugging self-consciously at his collar. Merryn and Nikesh exchange amused looks – she delighted in telling him about Rhys’s predicament the minute he walked in, being the cold-hearted fiend that she is – and Benedict just looks confused. He doesn’t really get the Twilight thing; the whole phenomenon has kind of gone right over his head, really.

I am so in love with Benny. So that makes two.

Very very awesome dear. Shall be back later to tell you exactly why.

BAHA! David Tennant wedding dreams. XD Oh, and then the glitter! It's just too much! XP So funny!

Seriously. This story never fails to make me smile and giggle to myself. I love it. :D

You know I would like to use the shower gel thing as a prank on someone. . . I wonder if it would actually work. Because I have some friends that lividly hate Twilight. ^_^

Well I find this really cute. It's just... endearing, with all the references and your wonderfully expansive vocabulary (as well as Merryn's--by the way, I love that name). Speaking of the vocab, I can defff tell this is a NaNo novel. XD Especially that part about Benedict listing his backpack's contents? Yeah. I love it. x)

Really, raelly good.

I ♥ the Sims 3 picture. Is that a screen shot of your own game?

Oh, and I didn't see any mistakes. Two in a row!

HOLY SHIZ
GRANGER DANGER
FOR. THE. WIN.


Geeky things are good enough for me, Leisha ;)

Merryn has won as my favorite though. She definately wins. And all the nerd referances are so win... they make me squee xD

And you want to know how awesome you are? I have to bribe myself with your stories so I can get my own updates finished xDDD

Infinitesimally. New favourite word? Well, no. Because phantasmagorical is just too good. But this one is definitely a close second. . . Seriously though, nothing beats phantasmagoria.

My grandmother has a thing about obituaries too. For her though, I think it's more of a last man standing sort of competition. XD

Do you know what I really like about this story? That I have to have an above average knowledge of geeky things, and an above average vocabulary to really understand what's going on fully. XD That second one is something I don't usually pay a whole lot of attention to. But, I'm noticing it in this, and it makes me smile.

I love this :D. Tis amazing. The most nerdiest story I've ever read; in a good way xD. Haha, I love Merryn's attitude to everything and everyone. It's hilarious :')

It's love, Leisha. Pure and simple love.

Funny thing: I watched Back to the Future last night

LULZ IRONY: Benedict is a veg-head, yet his name is a food dish based around animal-based products. I LOL'ED.

I really don't know what to say... because it's so brilliant. Though, I do think there was a sentance... somewhere... I think in the beginning, that wasn't complete. Other than that, flawless.

You really do have a thing for burnette protagonists, don't you?

Sorry that I'm only commenting about FIVE hours after I said I would, I didn't get the chance to read before I went to see my friend sing.
First of all: illecebrous
Lovely. Lovely, lovely, lovely, lovely, lovely, and I don't even know what it means.
Secondly: “On Wednesdays we wear Spock ears.”
I 'lolled' probably irritating my mother who's watching Atonement (blech >< )

Also, I didn't say this is my last comment but I really meant to. I love the bracketed bits <3 they remind me of Pratchett's footnotes and they comprise compressed hilarity and I just adore them.

But finally, I think I found the best thing in this chapter is actually not in the chapter at all, but in the footnote. That couplet- genius my love. Genius.
So, overall, I think my comment on this, chapter two of your already illustrious work is:
asdfghjkl gluh so much amazing <3 *die*