Arcana Majoria - Comments

I didn't totally understand the story, but I don't think I was supposed to. It wasn't like I was reading a story; more like looking in upon a scene as an observer. The words you use are completely lovely, completely poetic, completely capturing. I adore your writing style, with it's gorgeous descriptions and mixed in emotions. A great piece; not explaining things to the reader, but boldly placing them in the middle, to make of it what they will. Truly lovely.

Also, I loved the poem in the long description. It was a wonderful accent to the story.

So this will be terrible feedback until I get into the habit of it, so I’m not all to sure where to begin :3

I do love how this is written and your spelling, grammar and word choice is superb. You’re very good at this writing lark and I love your descriptions because their so rich. I think though, that though it worked, if you really want me to be nit picky you could have used other words for dancing and maybe you could have had another longer paragraph to match the length of the first one. But that’s me really being picky and talking poo a little bit because overall, it is brilliant.