Surprisingly enough, I found this easy to read, despite not being familiar with the language style of the piece. Perhaps it is because of the spaces in the drabble, which gave your mind a bit of a resting period. And ah, the spaces; how I adore them. It makes the whole story sound so much more like a trail of thought.
My favorite part was the section in bold, where the narrator was thinking about blow jobs, HIV, and Doctor Who. It was a perfect example of how the mind works. You're doing something, then you begin to think about something totally unrelated. It made the whole story seem very realistic.
I like the idea behind this, as well. It is a diverting subject that holds some hints of truth to it. "They act a superior to everyone else but they just think o what everyone else does." We're really not so different from each other, despite how some people act. This sentence accented this fact, and really tied the story up nicely.
My favorite part was the section in bold, where the narrator was thinking about blow jobs, HIV, and Doctor Who. It was a perfect example of how the mind works. You're doing something, then you begin to think about something totally unrelated. It made the whole story seem very realistic.
I like the idea behind this, as well. It is a diverting subject that holds some hints of truth to it. "They act a superior to everyone else but they just think o what everyone else does." We're really not so different from each other, despite how some people act. This sentence accented this fact, and really tied the story up nicely.
Another captivating story; well done.