Torn - Comments

Holy shit! This is fucking brilliant! The descriptives, the need to
know more, the little insights that tease you. And may I just say how
refreshing it is to see the POV done without having to notify the
reader? Man this just keeps getting better and better. I love it when a story
draws me in right away, making it hard for me to stop reading. And that
my dear is exactly what this one has done. I'm devouring this like a
coconut twix and I'm loving it!

Seeing two sides of Brian the tough guy business man and then the
loving father, even if he was is a jerk to his 'conquests' he's a
completely different person when Emily's around. I think Jimmy was
right that Brian is not going to take her new relationship very well at
all. But on the flip side of the coin, Matt seems to be able to turn
off that side of his life around Cass and maybe that's what draws her to
him. Although I'm not convinced she cares about him for much more than
uncomplicated sex, but hey I tend to over analyze everything so I could
be wrong...

I knew there were more underlying issues when it came to the thing with
Matt. I hesitate to use the R word because they do too.

I love Jimmy in this story, he's the only one who seems to look at
things from all perspectives. Don't get me wrong I love the goofball as
much as the next person, but seeing him portrayed in this story gives
me a warm fuzzy and huge smile.

I am still letting my feelings on this Drommond guy set aside for now.
I don't know why but for some reason I think Brian somehow pushed this
guy more than he should have out of greed and cockiness.

And why do I get the sick feeling Taylor was the one who called Mr. D
that night? Oh boy I need more...

I think the situation with Cass,Bri and Matt is about to get really
real and shit or something is going to fly. There are so many
unrequited feelings between Cass and B that Matt should have known
better than to get involved with her. Cass should have known better
too, but I think a part of her did it to get back at Brian for not
being the man she needed him to be. There are so many conflicted
feelings and I love it!

I had a bad feeling when Red was sucking Johnny off. At first I was
thinking she was gonna pull a Lorena Bobbit on him but she didn't. I
still hate he had to go out like that, but he would see it as an
honorable death I'm sure. I just hope one of the other guys instincts
kick in and they figure out what happened to him.

I knew that envelope was gonna be trouble and that Hurricane Haner was
gonna roll into town but the way he handled it was fucked up six ways
to Sunday. And the control he still seems to have over her irritates me
too, and I'm pissed at her for letting him have that kind of control.

The scene with Matt waking up to find Bri standing over him was
a-fucking-mazing. I could see that playing out like a movie in my head
and that is always someting I can never get enough of it means I'm
drawn in and invested in a story. And Jimmy just sitting back calmly
while all goes to hell amuses me. I love the way you've written him in
this.

Okay I apologize if I said too much but I tend to be bluntly honest
when I'm passionate about a story I read and as a writer myself I like
to think other writers would rather hear the truth rather than a lie so
I hope that was okay. This reads like a good book to me..

I absolutely love all the details you put into this story. Like I said
its like a book you can't put down.

A crooked cop being two faced doesn't surprise me because they are all
about the money. But I'm paitiently waiting for Jimmy to figure this
all out and well let's say I'm looking forawrd to that.

Brian and Cass falling so easily back into old ways was so what I was
hoping for. No offense to Matt but the connection between those two is
undeniable and seeing some vulnerability in Brian was a welcome change.

As for Taylor can I call her Gnat. I hope whoever is in the BMW is who
I think it is because I really want her and her father to get what's
coming to them loved it!

A fitting end to a crooked man. No I have no sympathy for Carney, my
only issue with his death is Brian should have prolonged it and made
him suffer longer.

I'm still processing the whole ordeal with Matt. Part of me wants to
feel sad for him because he does care for Cass so much and the other
says he knew what he was getting into and has no right to complain or
be bitter.

I'm also a little on the fence about Bri and Cass reconnecting. They
have that chemistry sure but are they good for each other. As I said
I'm conflicted and my feelings seem to change on the matter with each
chapter. That means you're doing a fantastic job.

It just keeps getting better and better. Seriously I don't know how
else to put it. I was hoping for a confrontation with Taylor but now
that I see where you went with it I'm okay with it. And even tho she
feels remorse she still needs to die. Yes I said it.

I admit I felt sorry for Matt this go round but I wish he'd get the
idea of rekindling his thing with Cass out of his head. Even if Cass
was conflicted which I don't think she is Brian would never allow it.
She's his property now and it still sort of pisses me off she's so
dependent on him. There go those conflciting feelings again.

Damn did you have to go kill Zacky too? Well as long as it wasn't Jimmy
I'll let it slide.

And why do I have a sinking feeling in the pit of my stomach when it
comes to Emily's safety. For once I hope I'm very wrong about that.

Not Emily! I don't care what type of revenge a person feels the need to
disperse you do not fuck with a child EVER! I hope she is okay, but as
I'm just delving into your works I just don't know. That irks me lol

As for Matt, I hope he is able to rectify his past mistakes but my gut
is telling me it might not work out the way he hopes, or that he ends
up paying with his life. Imma shut up now so I can go read what's left

Damn sure didn't see that coming. Wow I gotta give you kudos for
killing Brian off. I knew someone was going to die but I truly expected
it to be Matt trying to play the Hero to Cass.

I'm still not sure I'm on the boat with Matt and Cass but this was a
fitting end to a absolutely wonderful story even if it did make me tear
up a little.

And yes I realize this is epically long, but I was without net therefor could not properly reply when I read this so I want to make sure you knew how much I really enjoyed this and C&P my responses to you in the actual story thread. Much love to you sweetie. <333

i hate you so much right now. holy fuck.

This was by far one of the best stories I've read on Mibba. Perfect ending!

Your amazinnggggg my dearrr~ It was wonderful! I loved it!
Though...I didn't want Brian to die...or Zacky....or Johnny! But Oh well~ It still came out just perfect~ :D You rock! Love! Laterrr~ <3333

Wow so Brian is really gone huh.
Well at least Matt tried to find happiness with another person.
I feel bad that he was being squander by a whore for his money.
At least his old talents and traits came in handy for him to divorces that two bit whore.
Well at least they all aren't in the business anymore now just living out their days.
I feel that Matt and Cass will be together someday since they seem to still have the flame for each other.
It is hard to get over your first love, they will always be there in your heart no matter what.
This story is very awesome and was sad that Brian wasn't able to see his daughter grow but at least he was able to spend more time with his family before he went into the afterlife.
I look forward to the new stories that you will come out with!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XDDDDDD

Damn it! *grabs tissue again*
Even though I was fully prepared for this ending, I think it hit me harder this time reading it than the first time.
You know I've loved every moment of this story, and you know that I will no doubt be reading it again soon :)
<3

OMG I nearly cried hhe died :(

BRING BACK BRIAN!!!!!! Pretty please with a cherry on top?

OH MY GOD WOMAN! JESUS FUCKING CHRIST YOU KILLED BRIAN?!?! Matt I probably could have handled but Bri? Damn, as unrealistic as it was I was kind of hoping for a happy ending. You know with Brian, Cass and Emily all family like and stuff.... Now I feel all empty inside... =(
xXx

*bursts into tears* noooooo!!!!! i want a miracle gosh darnit!!!! bring him back!!!! waaah!!!

u killed brian u monster

Damn it woman, that ending has me in tears every fucking time I read the damn thing!
If I've said it once, I've said it a thousand times, I fucking love this story, every chapter of it (despite the deaths).
Another brilliant update Hun :) xx

Dude! No! I am so epicly upset with you at the moment. Like...I'm ready to ninja kick you in da mouth!!! He wasn't suppose to diee! Or does he really die in the end?!?! Ahhh...I am so angered. Hmph. Dammit. Lol.

OMFG you killed BRIAN!!!!!!!!!!!!
How could you!!!!
~SCREAMS and starts crying~
Okay I am calm, I knew you were going to pull something like this but I was thinking it would be Cass in stead of Brian.
Wow so two people betrayed her and used her for Carsilile revenge.
Yup it's too late now, they are both dead thank god and now Emily is back with her mom protection.
I wonder what will happen next, so you better update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

SO SORRY FOR NOT COMMENTING ON THE LAST CHAPTER!~!!!!!
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!! That asshole is finally dead!
I can see that he tried to use reverse physiology on her but backfired on him instead.
So he finally realized that his daughter isn't as heartless as him.
Well it's too late for him now that he has bullet in his head.
Wow so Matt is finally coming to terms that he'll never be with Cass because she is so much in love with Brian and they daughter.
The Dream Team is Back in Black!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
UPDATE SOON AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Yayyyy!!! More my lovely! I hope they get Emily!!!!!!!!

Ahh! Amazinngg! WHATS GONNA HAPPEN?!?!?! :DDDDD
More update please!!! <3

Ahh! Love the update!!! Your amazing...MORE!!!

Yep Natasha is no better than the thing she calls father.
OMG as glad as I am happy that Suzy is dead, I am still worried about Emily.
I can't the traitor still did it, I thought she would finally stand up to her father and not involve an innocent little girl in their stupid vendetta.
So Cass has a wild and dominate side to her?
I bet Brian is glad that he finally go her back in his arms.
Ohhh I know Cass and Brian will stop at nothing to get their daughter.
They are going to be pissed!!!!!!!!!!
PLEASE UPDATE SOON AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!XD

Awesome chapter Hun, looking forward to the next :) xx