Always Sometimes Never - Comments

I love how you wrote this. It's like it's being written in a diary, or as a note. At first, I thought the whole number thing would make it harder to read, but surprisingly, it didn't. And it didn't disrupt the flow of the story, either.

And I like how you don't directly come out and say what's happening and instead, you let the readers figure it out for themselves. Like, when I first started reading, I wasn't really sure what was going on, but when I got to the end, it all pulled together and I was able to figure it out.

Best drabble ever...your a really really good writer XD

Okay, first, I think that an awesome drabble such as this one should have a pretty awesome layout. Just sayin'. Second, I love how you numbered always, sometimes, and never instead of using the actual words. It gave this a more morbid and macabre feel. I'll admit that this had me majorly confused. Did he rape her and she had his child...? Gah, it's early here, but my mind is miles away. >.<
Anyways, I really enjoyed this, even though it was crazy insane. You definitely have an awesome way with words (:

Five seconds in when I realized the format this was in I was like, ‘OMG THAT’S AWESOME.’ I don’t know why but it’s kind of like a note format and I really like it. As if they were included in later on, as an afterthought but I’m not sure if that’s what you were going for. But yes, yes, I found it an interesting type. Anyway, we’ll start with the title – simple, explained clearly less than a moment in and it doesn’t need anything more than that; it’s perfect for it. The writing style Is straightforward and I like it.

It (3) disappoint
Disappoint just needs to be plural, by the way. I didn’t see any other grammatical issues like so, therefore I just decided to get it out of the way, ho-hum.

I don’t read much second person, present tense (I honestly can only remember reading it in a piece of flash fiction before) but I love how you executed it. It really fits the story and I don’t think it could have been told properly with the same tint of emotion if it were in third, first or past.

But moving on, moving forward, to the story. I am mildly creeped out while also being intrigued and a bit confused as well. From what I gather, the girl is locked in, willingly it seems like, a basement (WELL. I envisioned a basement somehow but it could just as easily be a spare room) and from your implications she’s… having quite a bit of babies down there. Or up there. Let’s stick with it being a basement for my sake.

I love how some things you chose to emphasize and other things you let stand alone.
I’m really quite interested in the story – the background, I mean. I’ve read it about… let’s say several times, definitely over three. The part I’ve been reading the most is:

He took you away from people who caused you pain, and hid you here, so he'd be the only one who did. But Father is responsible with pain. He does it only (2), when he needs to, when it's good for you. You don't need to forgive him.

That was definitely the part that hit me and even when I read it over the first time, I had to go back and read it again and again. Overall, the entire piece was amazing and it stayed with you afterwards. Well, it stayed with me afterwards; it’s thought-provoking, and not just in the sense of the story. I loved reading it.