Wow this was brillant, I love this description. it was just excellent
September 26th, 2010 at 10:10pm
Ah, it was like listening to the character's thoughts. The way the sentences flowed with each other, yet were in some ways disconnected. Exactly like the way the mind works. Starting, then stopping, then going on a different path. Simply wonderful.
I noticed you use words like 'nebula' and 'constellation' quite a bit. Not that I blame you. They're alluring words to be sure. In fact, it makes it seem like your stories always have a hint of galaxies at the edges. Like space is lingering at the border of your stories. It makes your stories feel rather epic.
The only complaint I really have is that last line. "It drives my internal improbability drive." I feel as if it should only have one 'drive' in there. Like it should be something like, "It pushes my internal improbability drive." But it's not that big of a deal. If you like it the way it is, then you shouldn't change it.
Overall, simply stunning.