Little Remains - Comments

I really don't like the layout D: I mean, it just gives the story an unappealing look y'know?
But, otherwise, it seems pretty good. I like it yea? And it seems to be going pretty well :3

Ohh, interesting summary. so like town murderers or sometihng?
first off, so I hate to be rude, but the layout kind of hurts my eyes
like how the first sentence has her being happy in it
I mean too many stories on here start with "wow im such a depressed person"
kind of attitude going on. and that's the reason I click away
Josh is such a hot name I swear. everytime someone is named josh, theyre hot haha
plus, he seems nice too. Lucy and Josh seem to be a cute couple
she just seems to have a really nice life. and I thinkthat's what you're going for
overall, very good job :)

I really liked your transitio. From the first to second chapter.
It really shows how quickly things change in a heartbeat!
And I agree with Ava, wtf a layout would make this story even better, <3

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I kind of like this. (:
It's cute.<3

The only suggestions I have would be like, wtf said, to add a layout. Those are more attracting to look at rather than the default, aha. Another thing, a little more important than the layout, is your grammar. There are a few mistakes every now and again and their just silly.<3

Once you spruce this up, I'm sure you'll have a lovely story on your hands missy.
This has so much potential and I like your writing style. :)

I suggest longer chapters and a lay out. I know some people wont even read a story if it doesn't have an original lay out.

But it does flow along quite well, perhaps a few more things could pop out every now and then but the pacing is great along with the wording of everything.