Night and Day - Comments

The layout is unique and it really adds to the creepy vibe you've got going on :3 I'll suggest moving it more towards the center though, but just a suggestion, haha.

I like the summary, it's mysterious and makes the reader want to read more! Anyway, moving on. I really like your choice of words and your sentences flow well, it seems almost rhythmical. I like the use of old fashioned language, it seems like something from a classical novel :3 Emma's POV is very different from Emmaline's but it's as intriguing because you've got your usual teenage angst thing going on and it's very realistic. I also like your descriptions, you're descriptive enough that the reader gets a picture of what's going on while not overloading them with detail :3

I really love your suspense and intrigue that you've got going there, it keeps the reader on their toes. Wonderful job <3

I like the way the story seems - mysterious in a way. It adds to the story (:
The title dragged me in and it made me interested to read.
Samuel’s blood in particular. I don't know why, but I like fell in love with this line. Haha :D
I think you've definitely got something good going here, I'm excited to see where your take this.
Great job, m'dear :D

You've definitely got an interesting concept here. I like the switch between story-telling to the diary perspective. It works well with the idea of a split life.

I enjoyed reading the chapters you have posted, and I hope there is more to come. :) You have a unique writing style.

One thing I would advise is to change the lay-out. Since you have thick paragraphs, the white lettering can get a little sore on the eyes. And it's not cool if that detracts from your writing. If you want, I could help you with a layout. :)