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That was rather interesting.
I wasn't sure what to expect reading the first few lines and I really didn't think it would end how it did and I liked that I didn't see it coming.
It was a simple and great drabble to read.

Oh, wow. As soon as I read this I knew I had to comment on it.

I honestly wasn't expecting the way it ended. I thought the dialogue was a conversation between two characters, which was probably your intent, but I had no idea what was going on, what was being talked about and what was going to happen.

I think the way you've used the dialogue without the tags and kept the sentences relatively short makes it all the more powerful. The words come in such rapid, short bursts, making it all the more effective.

The layout is really nice. I like the banner even more now because when I first looked at it, I never guessed that each picture was supposed to represent a "personality" of the girl character. It makes it so tragic now to think of it.

And so her limp body fell to the floor. By far my favourite line in the story, though that might sound morbid to say. The choice of words was great though, because it was a short description whereas some people might have chosen to describe it in great detail. It was better this way.

I loved this piece. It was short and straight to the point. If it had've been longer it probably would have lacked the impact and might have become drawn out. This was really, really great to read.

That was great!
I loved the way you wrote all those sentences, and I was able to read them in different voices, as if they were actually in my head.
Very powerful.