Les Bohèmes - Comments

Layout Creativity and Readability ~ 15/15
-Simple yet very creative and nice accented.

Grammar&&Spelling ~ 10/10
-I didn't see any. Good job! :)

Effort ~ 10/10
-I can tell that a lot of effort went into this, it is not easy saying so much in only a hundred words. :)

Detail&&Storyline ~ 10/10
- Very well written and thought out. I like that you used lyrics from each of the songs from rent. :)

How Well You Follow The Rules ~ 10/10

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Th layout didn't really appeal to me but when I read the description I was really sucked in! It's such a great idea to write like this. Very intruiging. You definiately pulled it off with your short but sweet descriptions of each person's life. I doubt you have heard of her but you really remind me of Maeve Binchy. If you read The Lilac Bus or Tara Road you will find it's the same style however the chapters are much longer. She writes about a different person's life in a certain town in Tara Road and with the Lilac Bus she writes about a different person's life who goes on The Lilac Bus. I love this idea and you definately didn't fail to please me with your short chapters. Well done!

This is amazing...i dont read lots of drabbles but i love the whole concept of the story:)

It is a very good story. I loved it, I honestly did.

The message in each chapter certainly speaks to the reader with a passion and relatedness. It made me feel as if I heard it somewhere before but it hadn't been put in such understanding words before. The details were well done, the situation is explained in just a few words, and yet the reader will understand everything.

It speaks to the heart, and I respect that in writing. You have the talent. Very well done.

-Echo.

This is a good story! Never read anything like it! It got kind of confusing, but I figured it all out. ;) Good work!

Before I get into the details, let me say that I love this a lot just because of the writing style. Not many people write stories this way, and the ones that do sometimes suck at the execution, but you nailed it. After I finished the first chapter, I wanted to read more just because of the simple fact that it was really intriguing. Fantastic job on capturing the reader.

Chapter One
I really like the Filmmaker. I got the concept that he might be deciding who to ex out of his life? For the benefit of bettering himself? I'm not sure because there wasn't a lot of elaboration as to why, but that's exactly why I liked it so much. He is definitely someone I would read a full novel on.

Chapter Two
Is it just me or would all of these make great prologues? Man, you do great with capturing my attention. I really enjoyed this one too. I feel as if the songwriter finds himself in his music. You makes it obvious that he sort of lives to play the guitar without stating it.

"You can't play the guitar wearing gloves." That's the perfect ending, I swear. Not only does it make me want to read more about him, but it also helped me understand how much he loves to play. Nice.

Life becoming like fiction, and having to document it would certainly be interesting.
And it's a wonderful sentiment, too.

The way you've written these is really lovely, because it's different aspects of one whole and each chapter seems to stand so well on it's own for only 100 words. I always struggle so much with drabbles, so well done! Brilliant.

I don't know why, perhaps it's because I love the colours, but the layout drew me in.

"His breath forms a delicate haze that hangs, crystalline, in the air. Every time he opens his mouth to release a word, the note appears to shiver.

He knows he should wrap up more, but won’t.

You can’t play the guitar wearing gloves."

I'm not sure what it is, perhaps the beautiful description that allows me to visualise this scene so clearly (I can almost feel the cold...) that makes me love it so. :O

"At least she won’t have to get Joanne on stage. That would be desperate." This line sort of made me smile sadly. She was referring to the girl in the last chapter right? The pole-dancer or something along those lines?

I take it Roger was the street musician.

"All that he can do is take each day as it comes, to keep loving and keep smiling." < Loving that line! The chapter itself was so sad (I feel tears pricking at my eyes), but that line sort of touched my heart. :)

The drummer and the street musician are my favourites I think, and the chapter with the Landlord:

"But, he observes, they aren't just living; they're creating, they're loving, they're surviving, taking each day as it comes and making the very best of it."

^That line just ties it all together.
I love this story, it's emotional, and it's so very well written. Sad, and yet happy. It's a beautiful piece of work, thank you so much for writing it. :)

This is amazing. Your word choice is just fantastic.
My favorite would have to be the street drummer "The street drummer knows that he is dying. Each beat that passes from his heart and through his fingers is really just a distant echo of the sands of life that are oh-so-slowly running out." That part, is just so spectacular. Amazing work, you really are a great writer.

Ahhhh, Rent. Love it.

Anyways, I love the idea you had of just letting each character have a little piece of the story. And the way you worded things was just... I loved it. I'm not sure if I would have loved it so much if I had never seen Rent. So that's just a little something to think about.

I love the line
You can't play the guitar wearing gloves.

That was probably my favorite part of this whole thing. (But I'm in love with Roger, so I'm probably a little bias.)

This is awesome.

:)

this is really good, it's beautifully written, i love it! =P

Amazing, everything, the layout, the stories, the writing style
all very beautifully written, and the quotes at the top of each are amazing too :O
i Love the contrats between all 8 people, but personally my favourite was the street drummer, im not quite sure why, its just that one stood out as very emotive and wonderfully written.
I loved everything about this
GREAT job! xD

Wow...this is soo good! I absolutely love it. Everything is written beautifully. This is the type of story I'd read more than once (which is not something I usually do). :D

I love Rent<3
The way you ended each chapter was graceful: simple but complex. You left me thinking and wanting more of your writing without giving a cliff hanger.
Very very well done :)

The layout is lovely~ And my favourite number is eight, so that's awesome (:

Everything is so simple and wonderful, and it doesn't need anything special or flashy. All it needs are your wonderful words (:

I felt like fluid while reading this, just free. It's wonderful, and I wish Mibba had a 'favourite' system, so I could add this, remove it, and then add it again.

I particularly enjoyed the Drummer chapter. Excellent job.

I'm going to go re-read this now.

(And what? I don't change my tenses, I have no idea what you're talking about :D But in all seriousness, I would like a beta reader.)

I think this is really interesting and all the people are so realistic :) It's great.

This is a very interesting concept, very original. I really enjoyed reading this. You've made these people real and I'm sure a lot of us can relate to them. You've got a fantastic way with words. Lovely job. <3

This is very interesting. I love how short each chapter is, and how enticing.

Very interesting, these people are.

I loved it.

Great job.

I love how this was done, it is very unique and extremely well written. I absolutely adore this, probably one of my favorites on this site. Good job :)

Wow. I've never read anything even remotely like this before. I liked how it's just little glimpses of each characters life. And then they're gone. But in all of the little glimpses we learn something important about the character. Whether it's how they feel about someone something. Or the way they feel about themselves. I think if any other writer had tried to tackle something like this, they would have failed. But your writing style suits the story. I'm not sure if this makes sense, but you sort of let the words speak for themselves. The language is minimalistic, you're not trying to create massively detailed descriptions or terribly clever metaphors. Your just storytelling. And it's perfect I think my favorite chapter was the last one. "But, he observes, they aren't just living; they're creating, they're loving, they're surviving, taking each day as it comes and making the very best of it." I think that paragraph is absolutely beautiful. This is excellent. Well Done.