Love at First Fight - Comments

I love the money reference!

The writing is easy to follow and it’s caught me hook, line and sinker! Off to read more!

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I love that the start of this is someone talking about money. It's so real and I think you captured the mindset of a lot of people just from such a small opening, and I really appreciate that.

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Okay, I don't know if it was meant to be funny or not, but I totally laughed when Agnes realized it wasn't Jesse that she had just slapped. I can't even imagine the amount of embarrassment that she must have felt afterward. The guy and the real Jesse sounded like complete opposites, so I'm not sure how she could've messed up so badly. Still funny, though.

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“Yes, but did the building have a four?” I began to mumble. He just stared at me and blinked slowly. Good. That always threw people off. And speaking of throwing people off, I pointed to the sky. “Look, a distraction!”

I probably laughed a little too hard at this, okay? I couldn't help it, it was funny LMAO.

I loved the conversation between Agnes and Laura, it was actually really funny. Actually, this entire story is funny and I'm enjoying it a lot! I'm wondering what will happen when Zahran catches up with her, if he does.

I'm excited to read more!

Hey! I love this story so far. It's an interesting concept although I'm still not exactly sure what Agnes does or who she is, but I like her! I love how she beat up the wrong guy I thought the way you wrote that scene was very funny. I love the layout and the photo it's really cool and definitely goes with the story. I really want to know where you got the picture, the art work is really cool. I really like this story and the first chapter was really well written describing money almost as if it were a person. Hope you update soon!

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"Money is not the most important thing in the world. Love is. Fortunately, I love money." - I absolutely adored this quote in the summary and it really pulled me in to see what kind of funny story you are writing here.

I love the narration in this story. You give a lot of detail, but they're very open and it doesn't weigh the story down. You have an air of mystery that I really like in this. You know how to give a few sentences that make the reader wonder what is going to happen, which is great.

You know how to write the unexpected to throw the reader off, but in a good way. It's really witty and I think this has a lot of potential.

Haha, this story is so funny. I am loving it so far. You have a really unique way of writing and I love it. :D

I love that you updates and I absolutely love this story. It makes me laugh so much but it is so smart at the same time, you know? The characters seem to be developing good and I think I saw some typos but nothing important. I think I may love Agnes and he -I cant remember his name haha- seems like an interesing guy. I also want Jesse to appear soon, I want to see him and see what she does to him.

A really original idea for a story, I dont think I´ve ever seen anything like it and I definitely would´ve never thought of it myself. Update soon!

XD Oh, wow, I love this story. I was laughing the whole (well, not literally, the entire) time, but it is a great story so far. I can't wait to see if Zah-- sells her organs on the black market :D Update soon, yeah?

hahahahhahahahahahahahahahbananahahahahahahhaha!

Please please please update soon. I haven't read something this funny since I stopped reading Meg Cabot.

I need to know what will happen next.

can't.
breath.

oh my god, oh my god. please continue. i'm laughing so hard, i can't even.
OH MY GOD, CONTINUE NOW. THIS IS MY FREAKING OXYGEN. I LOVE THIS. I LOVE THIS, I WANT MOREEEEE. PLEASE FEED ME MORE. I LOVE THIS SO MUCH.
and the layout is simply stunning. i adore it, and the banner is so creative and awesome.
i laughed at the "laura laura" thing. oh my gosh, please continue right now. i think i'm in love with this story. i've never felt this way before.
continueeeee!

Not only does the story seem that it will be great, you have an amazing way to write I am seriously impressed, and that is not common actually. " I also remembered Jade had a tendency to ramble on. I had to cut my memory there." that´s one of the best lines I have read on all the stories on mibba, it is simply amazing. I actually laughed, out loud! And I never do that. So congratulationes you have ctually blown my mind. Oh, and that prologe, simply perfect.

this is hilarious! im laughing my ass off
wowerful!

This was a pretty intense second chapter. I'll admit I'm a little lost. But I think I'm lost over things that I will be explained further throughout the story. Either way, I was laughing when she realized she beat up the wrong person. Very funny.

I can't wait to see where you go with this!

I wish I could help you out with the editing thing, but I adore editing. Probably would've been easier on you if you'd have cut up the chapters beforehand though. XD

Wow. That was amazing. I really liked it... Looking forward to the next chapters, therefore I shall subscribe =]

Wow, so first off, THAT COVER DOES NOT SUCK. It looks awesome! And the banner looks amazing too!
This looks very promising. The summary and the prologue are making me wonder what exactly his girl is doing... I'm looking foreword to more. (:

I'm looking forward to more! I've always enjoyed your stories and style and I'm sure this will be another favourite of mine.

'...hear a coin drop is gives me indescri....' mistake 1 :]
I'd like a refill; 2nd chapter por favor

Hmm. I'm thinking this could be pretty interesting. Amazing the things that come from NaNo, isn't it?

I can't wait to see what you do with this story.

OHMYGOD I JUST FINISHED READING IT.
...I never thought of money that way. It's so awesome.

HOLY CRAP. NOW I HAVE TO GO READ IT. AND THEN I'LL COMMENT WHEN I'M DONE. LIKE, YEAH.

you better, better better get this up!! Yes, this is a threat. No, I'm totally kidding, but this is an awesome idea. I can't wait for this to get out!