It felt almost like a cross between The Time Traveler's Wife and Doctor Who, both of which are awesome in their own right, and that way you've written it really works well.
I love how you refer to the traveller as the guide - it presents him in a very clever way as a figure of authority and reassurance. It is clear at the beginning of the story that the boy has trusted this man quite blindly, and that therefore makes the end of the story so much more tragic and heartbreaking.
You have a real skill for describing people's facial expressions, body languages and movements. One of my favourite lines is "He retracted his extended limb hurridly, jumping back in shock as the seemingly solid sheet of metal dissolved at his touch." I found that it really captures the essence and scientific nature of the whole time-travel concept, and it sounds almost mechanical, which really fits with the story.
It felt almost like a cross between The Time Traveler's Wife and Doctor Who, both of which are awesome in their own right, and that way you've written it really works well.
I love how you refer to the traveller as the guide - it presents him in a very clever way as a figure of authority and reassurance. It is clear at the beginning of the story that the boy has trusted this man quite blindly, and that therefore makes the end of the story so much more tragic and heartbreaking.
You have a real skill for describing people's facial expressions, body languages and movements. One of my favourite lines is "He retracted his extended limb hurridly, jumping back in shock as the seemingly solid sheet of metal dissolved at his touch." I found that it really captures the essence and scientific nature of the whole time-travel concept, and it sounds almost mechanical, which really fits with the story.
I love it.