@ little bird; I totally missed that! Chapters 2 and 3 were written very far apart from each other. I had this story up like.. two years ago and just revived it recently. As I typed up chapter 3, I totally forgot about the character's name lol. I fixed it though! Thank you so much for catching it! :)
I'm loving this story so far. I can't wait to see more.
But I'm just a little confused on one thing. Is it about two different girls? Because I noticed that, in chapter two, the math teacher calls her Theadora; but chapter three mentions a Mikaela Evans.
Beautifully written and a great concept. I hope to see more of it. And, I don't know if this is too personal to ask or not but, are you or have you ever been obese? Because it was written so well, and so I didn't know if you wrote it from experience or what. It just really hit home for me because I was obese for the majority of my life and know how hard it is. It never effected my social life. I always had a lot of friends and people loved and respected me, but I hated the way my body looked. I hated that I had so much trouble buying clothes, and that I was limited to what I could wear since I was so self conscious about parts of my body. And it wasn't even just about that, I hated not being healthy. And it's not like I was a pig and ate a lot or all the time, or just sat on my ass all day. It was actually the opposite. I was very active, and I'd either never have time to eat, or I never had an appetite during the day, and then when I would finally eat, it would be the wrong things, and usually at night. Plus, I partied a lot, so I drank a lot of beer, and that REALLY puts the pounds on! haha. It wasn't until two years ago that I became sick with some sort of a viral intestinal infection that made me throw up all the time, and made me unable to even think about putting anything in my stomach. I threw up even when there wasn't a thing in my stomach
It lasted for weeks, and I was admitted into the hospital so that they could keep an IV in me to keep me hydrated and give me nutrients. In the first week of the infection, I lost 30 pounds. By the time it was over, I had lost 90 pounds, making me skinny, but I wasn't at all happy with the way I lost it since it wasn't healthy in the least bit. So, I decided that I had been given a clean slate and I began to eat healthier and exercise regularly. I not only kept the prior weight off, but lost more weight, the right way. I've been so much happier since I've been able to buy the clothes that I like and look good in them.
Anyway, the point is, those couple of paragraphs really speak a lot about just one of the many large everyday struggles you have when you are obese. But, I thank the universe every day that it doesn't have to be that way anymore, and I ask whoever is listening that girls that are in my prior position can have the same kind of luck, and be healthy and happy. Because it's not just about the way you look, it's about living a happy and healthy life. =]
-Kate.
Post Script. Sorry I wrote such a long and boring comment. I just really wanted to express my gratitude and admiration for this chapter. It was simple, but spoke so much.
First off, I just want to say that I really like the layout. I so stole the background to set as my wallpaper haha.
The words flowed extremely well and I’m so glad you didn’t make it a continuous paragraph or fifteen l little ones. I hate that haha. It is difficult to read and comes off as choppy when people do.
I’ve got to say, I read the first paragraph and was like “the author must love smut.” Then the last line caught my attention and I was like “. . .” but kept on reading because it was very interesting and intriguing to me. I have an overweight friend and she wishes she could do just what the girl in the story tried. The only difference is my friend doesn’t try to put them on.
I can honestly say that I’ve never read a story like this on Mibba before. It’s very unique and very well written! You did fantastic.
Gosh, I know how that feels. Every girl has that one pair of jeans you squeeze into them. I like your wrting, its very good! and it's good to see a story about soembody whos actually not a stick! That's a good change. Keep up the good work :]
I am somewhat thrilled that you wrote this. Yes. I know many of us girls can relate to this; trying to fit into jeans and thinking they're fat because the jeans don't fit. I love the last line for it had a lot of power, if you know what I mean. I like the banner/layout-they're simple and pretty. No one writes about the fat girls. They always make the characters beautiful and...skinny, so I loved that this story is different. Nicely done with this.
this is brillant The opening is wonderfull in the fact it builds up to something - then at the last moments changes to some much more innocent. keep writing I shall subscribe =D