Let Go - Comments

One thing that I really like about this was that I read a story that was based off of a picture of boy wearing a “Fuck Justin Beiber” shirt. So I think it’s funny that the girl in this story is wearing that shirt. Her style sounds very cute. I like how you describe everything. It was easy to picture the scene as it unfolded.

The guy and the girl are extremely cute and I think this could go a few chapters farther. You don’t have to, I’m just saying they are adorable haha.

All in all, I think you did pretty good.

This was kind of cute. :)

Your writing style intrests me. Though I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, I feel everything is a bit off. Almost like everything starts, stops, and then repeats.

An example would be this line (not an exact quote, but refrences a line in your story) Donuts made her happy, they were her happy food. I really think this could've been worded better. Something like, "Donuts were her happy food," would suffice. That generally covers the idea that they make her happy.

Another thing I noticed is that some of your grammar is off. You switch back and forth a few times when using your past and present tense. A little clean-up on that, too, and it'll be all good. (:

I really thought this was cute. The banner just seemed to add to the flow as well, which was an adorable touch. I also liked how he didn't know her name at first, but we learned it in the end. Nice touch. <3

This was an interesting, and enjoyable read. :)
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