Sing a Song of Forgetting - Comments

I absolutely adored this. I thought it was touching.
The relationship between the father and daughter was subtle at first but then it was brought to the forefront and it the most touching ways. I loved how he choose to go home with his family instead of going out with fans. I loved the fact that the first day of school was more important to him then drinking.
I also enjoyed the fact that the guy said 'it's okay.' When I had family that died and people asked me what's wrong, it was horrible. It's as if you have to relive that entire day again. By saying 'it's okay' you are putting a sense of hope into the person without forcing them to relive that horrid moment.

I think this is brilliantly written.
I think it's a unique piece, and you really show the emotions throughout.
It leads to many questions, which is always good in a piece of writing because you get to decide what the answers are.
Great job. Well done.

I saw this in Rate the Story and had to know the context of the excerpt there. I like that this focuses on the relationship between a parent and a child rather than on the guy she's met. I generally tend to read pairing focused stories when I read online so this was a nice change.

I also like how abrupt it is; how his declining health is mentioned so briefly. It really gives a sense of her unwillingness to reflect on it and maybe her inability to accept it too.

Only thing, make sure to double-space between the paragraphs and dialogue. But this was a well done story.