Grey Wolf Mountain - Comments

I love this story so much! And I'm not saying that just so you'll update lol. I read all of the chapters you have posted today and right now its midnight and I still want to read more! You could say I'm utterly devestated that I have to wait for your next update. Your chapters are so amazing though, I love how long they are and how you write in third-person so well, I've always found it hard. I love how you didn't have Ava just fall for Grey the moment they met, it made their relationship more realistic for me as a reader. Your grammer is perfect, the originality is 10 out of 10 in my opinion, and you really know how to make a reader feel for a character. The chapter where she wakes up from her nightmare and goes to Grey in the middle of the night is one of my favorite chapters, the other is when she confides in him. Then theres also the one where he first kisses Ava when they're meditating, goodness, that was such an amazing first kiss between the two of them. Oh yeah, I also love love love the chapter where Greyson holds her and they almost kiss after she killed the deer. I was so angry that Logan had interupted them! Lets just say I love all of your chapters! I'm dying to know what Greyson's secret is, even more so now that I know it deals with Ava's home. Also, I'm so bloody eager to read the sequel you keep talking about and I'd love to hear what the title is!

Kristalynnxx:

Wow! Nice long chapter!! :) Love it!
It was nice to see Grey and Ava get out and enjoy themselves for the day. But I wonder what Mr. Grey's secret is! You've got me hooked! Glad they got Lucian! But I still have a feeling we haven't seen the last of him.
YES! I want to know the title of the sequel!!
Can't wait for another update!!
keep up the great work!! :)

Ha ha, Mr. Grey :)
I feel as if I didn't build the 'secret' aspect up enough from the beginning, since he did have this secret since they met... but at least it's getting some attention now. I'll probably fix it when I go back to review the whole thing again.
The Council has Lucian. You either don't have faith in the Council, or you understand that the Council's not really the good guy in all aspects...
:) Good, cause I want to tell people the title to the sequel. Ha ha, but of course, it will raise questions.
Sunny-Lee <3

Wow! Nice long chapter!! :) Love it!
It was nice to see Grey and Ava get out and enjoy themselves for the day. But I wonder what Mr. Grey's secret is! You've got me hooked! Glad they got Lucian! But I still have a feeling we haven't seen the last of him.
YES! I want to know the title of the sequel!!
Can't wait for another update!!
keep up the great work!! :)

asdfkjkl;ksdjfa omg I love your story :D im addicted to it, its crazy!

Hahaha. I can't picture Greyson doing paperwork. >_<

I like The Seedless Avocado. It sounds like a fun place. Does it really exist or did you make it up? :D

Ew. Lucian. *raises pitchfork* Why must the antagonist still be around?! ARRRGH! D:

I don't want Ava's heart to be broken... but I have a feeling... AGAIN--stupid Lucian. T_T

HAHA. Riley. Pfft. Riley... HAHAH. Riley. XD

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!! =D

PhoebenPaige:

awesome update finally the secret is out :) i can imagine how much better she feels now that she told him n she got a little release too ;) does this mean she's marked? or ? idk anyways I cant wait for more :)

No, this doesn't mean she's marked... I guess I didn't explain that very well. It's definitely explained later on, but to clarify for you now. Marking would be when one wolf physically bites the other, therefore, leaving his 'mark' on her.
Sunny-Lee <3

MarriahShadows:

Gonna start off here first: The sex scene.
...
To end, I am super stoked for the next chapter and cannot wait six more days for it! ;P
I can't wait to see what else is going to happen and if Lucian will ever be caught. You, without a single doubt, have me on the edge of my rolly chair!
On another note, I hope you don't like my comment too much becuase I can't promise the next one will be as long or share as many of my thoughts. It might just be a "Good job, kiddo. Update soon." :)
But for this one, I had just soooo much to say and thank you for.
With that being said....later, homie. ;)

I definitely made your comment shorter to reply to you. This definitely made my day :) Originally I wasn't even going to have sex in the story, but as my ideas progressed, I realized that it was almost needed, you know? So that's how it happened.

I adore how you call Greyson "Grey" :) That's how I think of him in my head, affectionately, but I know that when I wrote it, I definitely wrote "Greyson" more than "Grey".

I agree with you in the area that I kinda wanted Greyson to just full on beat Logan up for what he did... but I also know that's not the guy that Grey is. He's protective, but since Logan is also a part of his wolf pack, he's protective and nice to him too. I dunno... I hope you understand that. Like, he loves Ava, but he's not going to use that to give him a reason to beat Logan up. Understand?

I love morning after scenes... cause they can go both ways. But knowing Greyson's personality, I also knew he's be super romantic and nice. :) I love Grey. lol. I think it'd noticeable :\

I'm glad I have you on the edge of your rolly chair :)
And I don't expect a super huge comment next time just because of this one. lol. I understand that this was a special chapter, and a lot of stuff happened in it. :)
BUT your comment made my day :D

Sunny-Lee <3

awesome update finally the secret is out :) i can imagine how much better she feels now that she told him n she got a little release too ;) does this mean she's marked? or ? idk anyways I cant wait for more :)

Gonna start off here first: The sex scene.

Honestly, it doesn't feel right calling it that, because it wasn't just a sex scene for the sake of having sex in the story. It was two people sharing themselves because of the love that they felt. And for that, I am infinitely grateful to you. I believe you wrote it incredibly well and thank you for not adding moaned curse words. At first, I didn't think you'd have Ava and Grey go that far, but as I read, it seemed like a natural occurance to happen between them at this point.
Unlike most stories with sex in them on this site, this is an actual story with an actual storyline and I think the love scene moves the storyline forward instead of lacking meaning. Let's face it, most "stories" on this site are written (and read) purely for the smut and are more sex scenes than anything else. (Gonna step off my soap box now.)

Now, I love how you balanced the heavy with the light in this chapter. You struck both notes dead on with amazing accuracy. First, there's Ava opening up to Greyson, then they make love, and then there's Logan.
What a jealous weasel!....That was my initial first thought and now, I just kinda feel like his feelings are hurt. From his point of view, he is getting the short stick here. His best friend moves in on the girl he's digging and tries to woo her behind his back.
But, at the same time, Logan never revealed to Grey how he felt about Ava, and should understand that Grey would never lie to Ava about them being destined to be together.
No matter how badly Logan's feelings are hurt, he should remember one simple bro code: Bros before hos. Not that Ava is a ho, haha.
And like Ava, I was hoping that Grey would smack Logan a bit instead of just demoting him, but I kept in mind that Grey and Logan are friends and that Grey was going easy on him even though I felt he shouldn't have. But that's because I'm biased toward Grey, not gonna lie about that, and Logan's third grade jealousy is annoying.

I loved the ending. So freaking adorable. The little morning after flirting between Ava and Grey was too cute. I loved that Grey took Ava's feeling into consideration and decided to make her breakfast which he would have given to her in bed if it weren't for Logan. And then there's Ava, making her dominance known over Logan.
Now that gives me a bad feeling. I have a nagging sensation that Logan will not take being demoted and humilated so lightly seeing as how they happened back to back like that by the two people he's more than angry with.

To end, I am super stoked for the next chapter and cannot wait six more days for it! ;P
I can't wait to see what else is going to happen and if Lucian will ever be caught. You, without a single doubt, have me on the edge of my rolly chair!
On another note, I hope you don't like my comment too much becuase I can't promise the next one will be as long or share as many of my thoughts. It might just be a "Good job, kiddo. Update soon." :)
But for this one, I had just soooo much to say and thank you for.
With that being said....later, homie. ;)

Kristalynnxx:

Was not expecting that to happen! But I'm glad it did. :)
Greyson and Ava are just so cute together. I imagine them having a cute little boy running around the house later on down the road. :)
Now Logan, I have very mixed emotions about him. He's a complete jerk but at the same time I feel bad for him. For loving someone who doesn't love him back. But he's not thinking of Ava, he's thinking of himself. He's very selfish.

Another fantastic chapter!! OH! It's great to hear that you're working on the sequel!! :)
Cannot wait for another chapter! Update again soon!!

What a completely beautiful picture of them you have in your head :) Very Disney-esque :)

I feel like a lot of people are very selfish in their love, so I personally, can see where Logan's coming from.

:)
Sunny-Lee <3

Was not expecting that to happen! But I'm glad it did. :)
Greyson and Ava are just so cute together. I imagine them having a cute little boy running around the house later on down the road. :)
Now Logan, I have very mixed emotions about him. He's a complete jerk but at the same time I feel bad for him. For loving someone who doesn't love him back. But he's not thinking of Ava, he's thinking of himself. He's very selfish.

Another fantastic chapter!! OH! It's great to hear that you're working on the sequel!! :)
Cannot wait for another chapter! Update again soon!!

MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORE!!

I've been waiting for ages!

...the prized deer happens to be a large buck. No worries, he's had sons with him. He's not the only male, so the line will not go extinct.

That just made me laugh. Haha. I felt like a part of you, Sunny, had come out... you know, the vegetarian part? Haha.

T_T I feel kind of bad for Logan. Boo.

I love this story! I can't wait for your next update.

love this story lots i cant wait for more :)

MarriahShadows:

Logan is such a dick.
I don't know what it was about chapter nine that made me like it so much, but there was definitely something there.
Maybe it had to do with the family feel of the pack's group run.
And Logan needs to get over his jealously.
I'm definitely looking forward to the talking to Grey's gonna dish out to Logan.
I wonder if Ava will chime in with some colorful words for Logan too. That'd be funny to read.
Can't wait for the next update. I'm not sure if I've said this before, but I'm excited for the sequel.

I also love the family feel of the pack run :) Because they are pretty much a group of immediate families that come together as an extended family.
I'm glad you're excited for the sequel... even though the first one isn't over yet. lol.
Sunny-Lee <3

Logan is such a dick.
I don't know what it was about chapter nine that made me like it so much, but there was definitely something there.
Maybe it had to do with the family feel of the pack's group run.
And Logan needs to get over his jealously.
I'm definitely looking forward to the talking to Grey's gonna dish out to Logan.
I wonder if Ava will chime in with some colorful words for Logan too. That'd be funny to read.
Can't wait for the next update. I'm not sure if I've said this before, but I'm excited for the sequel.

I wish I could have found the time to read this sooner.
I hope you're not tired of hearing me say I love your story, because I truly do love your story.
And the end of chapter eight was perfectly adorable.

“We can hold hands and kiss in public, and look insanely happy, and I can finally tell Logan to back the fuck off.”

That was my favorite part of the chapter.
Now, onto chapter nine.

Igh...Logan...why must you touch things that don't belong to you...!?!?!? gosh...he's a meanie...!!! :( ...plz update soon...!!!