Gibber - Comments

Wow, why haven't I read this before? It's really good. It's only the beginning and it's really good. I just love everything about it. Just the idea of these shadows that lurk around and can take a human-like form is cool. I love how you describe everything, and how you've introduced your wonderful plot. I can't wait to read more. (:

Wow, that first chapter was bit creepy(: It really surprised me when you said it wouldn't be fantasy, but that also makes it better, in a way. I really like how you focus on the darkness and the paranoia, it's much different than a lot of stuff I've read(:
Subscribing? Oh yes

OMFG ! you've read Fallen ????? I LOVE THAT BOOK ! is it a fan-fiction for that, but you shouldn't let thwe deamons and angels too early in !!! it wasn't until half-way through the book they mentioned it was all real! BUT I'M LOVING ITTTTTTT ! BAH UPDATE SOON XD

Okay, first of all, I'm notoriously sorry for not commenting you back when I said I would >.< Things got a little too busy for me >.> Anyways, I think that this has to be the most amazing and intriguing stories I've read on Mibba since...forever. You've definitely caught my interest with this; creepy/fantasy-ish/awesome stories? Yes please :D So while I was reading the first chapter, I totally wanted to know what those shadow things are, especially when the main character said, "Mostly I see the shadows out of the corner of my eye." They seem so creepy and awful, but yet awesome. In a very creepy way that give you goosebumps xD I keep thinking that they're ghosts or something o.O Anyways, judging by what I've read, I'm definitely subbing. I'm gonna read the next chapter when I can :D <3

Wowzas. That first chapter just left me dazed. ' Mostly I see the shadows out of the corner of my eye' --who doesn't love a start like this? I love the atmosphere to it-dark, mysterious, suspense the things I loved. Of course I'm subbing. In the middle, there was a part that I loved in particular. ' They move to where they need to go, passing by with just a whisper, almost as if to say, "Sorry for intruding.'

When I finished I was totally thinking this was fantasy. It's just the way you write, it's beautiful and mesmerizing. I was shocked to know it's realistic fiction. Totally subbing.

WHAT THE HELL ARE THOSE SHADOWS!?!?! :O
Sorry, haha, it was just my spontaneous reaction to this story. x]

Well, you caught my interest, for sure. I don't really read unfinnished stories, but I'll bookmark this and keep an eye out for it, because I'll want to know where you take this, no doubt. I loved the way you used the words in a way where it felt like the pace was kind of fast. Like, I felt like I was reading fast and faster with every word, just because that's how the flow went.

Ingest, reject, destroy. Feed, feed, feed.
This alone just makes me read faster, and it makes me want to know what's really going on. Like, are the shadows literal shadows, or is it a massive metaphor or am I reading too much into the story? It's caught my interest, and I'm asking myself questions. Only a good author can make a reader ask themselves questions. Very good job!

The layout is creepy but I love it. It totally sets the mood for the story.

I hate shadows. Like, seeing them on the walls of my bedroom and thinking they're something else entire, no thanks.

So, I enjoyed these two creepy chapters :)

The shadows have plans for me, I think. – I love this. It’s dark, and mysterious in a way. It makes me shudder with goose bumps.

[chapter two] – I liked the description you gave the town; sounds almost like where I live now.

Actually I love all of your description, I like the plot, and I like the concept. One thing I would give advice on though; it just to bring in the white space [where you write] to match the picture. (:

So, I'm just saying that they text seems a bit hard to read for me, like I have to focus really hard on what I'm reading. But, other than that your layout is really really gorgeous :)

don't know if they'll ever try to hurt me or not, but I hope that they won't. I try to respect them as much as possible. I do what they want. It makes me think Ghosts for sure :) I feel that the prologue is much more interesting than the first chapter, the first chapter seems to be more of a short introduction.

Before I even read the authors note on the first chapter, I could tell it wasn't going to be a fantasy. For me, shadows and darkness are just all too real. Not just in the sense of demons and such, but just letting things control and take the best of you completely away.

I'm totally subscribing, just so I can see where you're headed with this. I love how you don't give away massive details in the first few chapters either... (when writers do that, it just annoys the hell out of me) you're giving the story the space it needs to build up.

Ok I'm subbing that chapter was a bit shorter but this is well written the layout isn't over done and I have been really intrigued by it.

They make me look over my shoulder and sleep whichever way allows me to see most of the room~~ Iv had that feeling before excellent description!

O.o now I'm supper curious, what does she feed on? What are these dark figures? What is the plan? Why can only she see them and why do they need her?

Very excellent depending on the second chapter I might subscribe.

I have vague, buried memories of the shadows, their bodies fully formed, with more substance than any other time before.
I feel like that sentence has one break where the flow is disrupted. their bodies fully formed with more substance... I get the feeling that that's how it is meant to be read, but I could be wrong. It just doesn't quite sit well with me.
In saying that, it could be like: I have vague, buried memories of the shadows - their bodies fully formed, with..... I just feel like there's a lot of commas, and it doesn't quite create (I'm assuming) a desired e/affect.

zombie-like life that I led - lead?

I love your use and description of the shadows which might/do appear to allude to something else. I keep thinking of depression...due to the heavy shadows and how they feed off what the narrator has...consuming the being. But then, as the chapter comes to an end - it trails off into addiction. I'm really not sure what the intentions are behind this story, and I'm sure they'll become clear soon. :] You've got all these possibilities, and they make the shadows seem that much more intense. (That all sounded rather jumbled...)

Anywho, I could totally be off the mark with what I said.

I shall subscribe, because you have got a really captivating writing ability, and I love the way it seems to sometimes take a dystopian theme in it, even if you're quite unaware of it happening. :]

So this is fantastic. Probably one of the most interesting topics I've read on this website. And I love that it's realistic fiction but it just sounds so...unrealistic. I had such a dark ominous vibe in my head while I read this and I loved it. It almost reminded me of the Heartless in Kingdom Hearts--ignore my nerd reference. But it did in a way. How they're surrounding this girl in darkness...taking her light. Just like the Heartless in that game. o.O

They hang behind your back, just close enough that their presence feels like a weight on your back. This was the only sentence that sounded kind of iffy to me. the repetition of 'your back' disrupts the flow of the entire chapter.

At first, I was a little hesitant to read this, but I'm very glad I did. The layout is very good, and the summary just made everything so much more interesting. I agree with Spencer Smith., though. The font it a little different, but I think thats because it's not what I normally see on here.

This was amazing. I love the detail and description you use. I'm interested as to what these shadows actually are. I'm really intrigued. I can't wait until you update. I'm gonna subscribe. =D

Okay, number one, the layout is gorgeous. I just loved it and how it added to the story. The one thing that did irk me is the font. I think it's because I'm used to reading Times New Roman, but yea, don't mind silly ol' me.
The summary was something else, it kind of made me think it was a story about a drug-addicted teenager and the parent struggling to help their child overcome it. Looks like I was wrong.

All in all, I really liked it, it's gonna be an amazing piece of work. Continue <3